The author of a memorandum claims that his television station should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its formal level otherwise current time devotion will cause the reduction of advertisement revenues and viewers of late-night news program. The author relies on several assumptions which cannot be taken for granted thus further evidence pertaining to more information about complaints of viewers and advertiser, and other favorable changes due to its modification of time has to be demonstrated.
Firstly, the author assumes that the complaints of weather and local news are the same as the opposition of change of time table of late-night news program. It is uncertain that viewers who have complaints about coverage do not forbear "the changed time" of the program. If they just want to require the television station to enhance their quality of news or a specific reporter, to restore of the time devoted to weather and local news would be no effectiveness for what the author wants to achieve.
Secondly, the author presumes that scheduling time of the program and cancellation of advertising contract by local businesses have a causal relation, however, it may not be true. Adequate evidence is sparse to confirm author's causal assumption. Local businesses might have canceled their contracts because of their economic situation, marketing strategy, or stop of producing the product which they advertised. To assert to restore time, the evidence related to cancellation of contract is necessary.
Furthermore, even if advertisers of local businesses do not want to advertise via the television station due to the time devoted to weather and local news, and the viewers have a complaints because of the same reason of businesses, it may not mean that to restore of the time is the best choice. Because, the change of time happened over the past years, certain businesses choose to contract with the television station considering the time schedule of current form. Thus the television station has to balance the profits of getting new businesses who choose the station recently and the cost of losing the some local businesses who do not favor the new time policy.
In sum, the author suggests that it is better to change their time devoted to weather and local news to its former lever, but this argument depends on unjustifiable assumptions thus to strengthen or weaken the claim it is necessary to present further evidence related to his or her unstated assumptions.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 406 350
No. of Characters: 2057 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.489 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.067 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.777 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.992 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.419 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.663 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 512, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s for what the author wants to achieve. Secondly, the author presumes that sched...
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Line 3, column 504, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... cancellation of contract is necessary. Furthermore, even if advertisers of loca...
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Line 4, column 179, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a complaint' or simply 'complaints'?
Suggestion: a complaint; complaints
...er and local news, and the viewers have a complaints because of the same reason of businesse...
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Line 4, column 469, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ring the time schedule of current form. Thus the television station has to balance t...
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Line 4, column 609, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...ion recently and the cost of losing the some local businesses who do not favor the n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 406.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18472906404 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85958045329 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448275862069 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.999589085 57.8364921388 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.923076923 119.503703932 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2307692308 23.324526521 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348174220041 0.218282227539 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147715153918 0.0743258471296 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11162228034 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216039409161 0.128457276422 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0974149148013 0.0628817314937 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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