The Pleasantville School Board should take measures to increase the number of volunteers. Teachers, parents, and other community members agree that it is important for young people to learn the value of community service. Requiring high school students to engage in community service would provide much-needed assistance to worthy local charities and would also help young people understand the importance of giving back to their community. For this reason, the Pleasantville School Board should institute a program requiring students of Pleasantville High School to complete 40 hours of community service prior to graduation.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted
It is stated that the Pleasantville School Board should implement a program to undertake 40 hours of community service before one getting graduated. They have concluded it in order to make the young understand the value of service and charity. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, three questions must be answered.
First of all Does this 40 hour servie prior to graduation enables the students to inculcate the importance of service in their hearts? Perhaps they may just do it for the sake of graduation as a namesake and leave about that once the 40 hours is completed. In this case the conclusion drawn in the argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, Even if they knew the value of service, is it that they render it for their society exclusively? In other words do they serve only locally. Perhaps they might get shifted to other community due to transfers or to persue higher education. It was prematurely assumed that implementing a 40 hour program leads to provide assistance to worthy local charites and helps the teenagers understand the value of paying back to their community.
Thirdly, What if the they complete the 40 hour program before a month of getting graduated? This does not let the high school people know the value of community service. If they knew it few months before getting graduated they might migrate on purpose of job and leave the community. More over the graduate's age is different from High School childrens' age and this does not let the High School Students know the value of community service. In such case the argument stated does not hold strength.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on unwarrented assumptions. If the author is able to answers the above three questions and provide more evidence then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of proposed recommendation to implement a 40 hour program in the school prior to graduation.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 331 350
No. of Characters: 1614 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.265 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.876 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.717 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.815 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.038 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ated, three questions must be answered. First of all Does this 40 hour servie pr...
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...the argument is significantly weakened. Secondly, Even if they knew the value of...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...alue of paying back to their community. Thirdly, What if the they complete the 4...
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Line 1, column 1149, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'they'?
Suggestion: the; they
... their community. Thirdly, What if the they complete the 40 hour program before a m...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...argument stated does not hold strength. In conclusion, the argument as it stands...
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Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...ree questions and provide more evidence then it will be possible to fully evaluate t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 331.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94561933535 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8096839164 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492447129909 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7842726361 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2941176471 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4705882353 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194942414546 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668084625603 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902095640579 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194942414546 0.128457276422 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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