"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the adver

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"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

In the statement, the author suggests that businesses should only hire people who sleep less than six hours per night in order to have prosperous future. To bolster this, the author cites the result of a study conducted on mentian advertising executives showing an inverse relationship between the sleeping time and success of the firm. however, the argument is tenuous in several aspects.

The survey mentioned in the argument includes 300 male and female executives from mentian advertising companies. however, there is a hidden assumption that those executives are representative for the general population. it is possible that executives are likely to bear more works and be responsible for projects that associated with higher profit, thus their devotion of sleeping time can lead to an effective a growth for the business. Nevertheless, this is usually not the case for general employees. it is possible that when employees are being deprive of sleep, they likely to work less efficiently and the whole working environment will be enervated, which will bring a negative effect on a business’s prosperity.

The author suggests that there is a relationship between the amount of the sleep needed and how successful a business can be. Nonetheless, the result of the survey that included only 300 executives from one specific company could be a mere coincidence; there is no credential amount of evidence to justify a relationship between the two. it is possible that the survey coincidentally asked the ones who have the habit of sleep less than 6 hours per day. it is also possible that the survey has been done during the time where the economic condition is good, thus businesses are gaining higher profit.

The author is being over-positive and unfairly ignores the differences and similarities between mentian advertising companies and other types of companies. even though less sleep might not hurt or even improve the employees’ working efficiency in mentian, it is unreasonable to generalize this situation to all other firms. For example, for a construction company, if they only hire workers who sleep less than 6 hours a day, it is highly possible that the injuries during the job will increase. it is also possible there are other factors that contribute to the growth of mentian company, such as online advertising becomes so prevailing those days that leads to its rapid growth.

In sum, the author’s argument is logically flawed and the evidence used is also groundless. To strengthen it, the author should consider whether it is reasonable to make analogy between mentian advertising company and other businesses and a deep and comprehensive survey should be made before suggesting a relationship between sleep time and success of a firm.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, incidentally, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, then, thus, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2383.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 446.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34304932735 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99012111252 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479820627803 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3215348867 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.388888889 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7777777778 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285279037415 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899674659566 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755136082913 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165302116382 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527316817938 0.0628817314937 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 446 350
No. of Characters: 2271 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.596 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.092 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.854 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 44.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.961 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.43 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.726 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5