In this statement ,there is a twenty-year study of patients in Mentia who suffered headaches shows that the salicylates, a kind of efficient components like aspirin, can reduce the illness and the pain of the patients in Mentia. Also , the salicylates is used by food company as flavor additives and preservatives into the foods, which may imply the patients who eat the food containing the salicylates will have the effect which reduce the headaches. I think there are some fact that we need to evaluate carefully.
First of all, the study was confined by a single place without the number of the participants and contrast group. Testing a medicine's effectiveness requires los of conditions. The study's geographic limitation will undermine the conclusion made by the study. The author does not tell us how many participants joined in the study, because with few paticipants, likewise, the conclusion isn't compelling. What's more, the author does not show us whether there was a contrast group participants who never take salicylates, at this point ,we cannot conclude the effect of curing headaches is from taking salicylates. This is the most significant point which we can predict the result in a study, the author should indicate this condition.
Secondly, because of the existence in the food , the original source of salicylates obsecure us by the way of taking them. We cannot define where the participants absorbed this matter, either from preservaives or flavors additives could be possible.Moreover, because there are several ways in we cooking and eating foods, whether the main components of salicylates is changed into another matter still confuse us. The author makes the study a little complicated that we cannot conclude the effect of salicylates from the foods have the effect of curing headaches at last.
Third , the trend of headache's declining shows no obvious relevance to taking salicylates. As the author mentions in the statement, there is a steady decline of the number of patients who suffered the headaches,but due to the analyze we discuss above, we cannot conclude it is the result of taking salicylates.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 348 350
No. of Characters: 1750 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.319 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.029 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.812 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.224 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.565 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.209 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
In this statement ,there is a twenty-year study of patients...
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Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...the pain of the patients in Mentia. Also , the salicylates is used by food company...
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Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to evaluate carefully. First of all, the study was confined by a single place...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'medicines'' or 'medicine's'?
Suggestion: medicines'; medicine's
...ticipants and contrast group. Testing a medicines effectiveness requires los of condition...
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Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...w paticipants, likewise, the conclusion isnt compelling. Whats more, the author does...
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Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...kewise, the conclusion isnt compelling. Whats more, the author does not show us wheth...
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Line 3, column 533, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ho never take salicylates, at this point ,we cannot conclude the effect of curing ...
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Line 5, column 47, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ly, because of the existence in the food , the original source of salicylates obse...
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Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
... or flavors additives could be possible.Moreover, because there are several ways in we c...
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Line 7, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ct of curing headaches at last. Third , the trend of headaches declining shows ...
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Line 7, column 211, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...r of patients who suffered the headaches,but due to the analyze we discuss above, we...
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Line 7, column 223, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...s who suffered the headaches,but due to the analyze we discuss above, we cannot conclude i...
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Line 7, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...yze we discuss above, we cannot conclude it is the result of taking salicylates. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, likewise, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, third, i think, kind of, by the way, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 345.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20869565217 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9854468762 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507246376812 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.6560861342 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.357142857 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 5.70786347227 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171709463159 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613791134992 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568117675002 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11104405567 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521550033019 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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