A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches.

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A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

The author predicts that inhabitants of Mentia will suffer from less headches after salicylates are used as food additives. His prediction is based on a 20 year long study regarding therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. However, before this prediction can be properly evaluated 3 questions must be answered.

Firstly , Will the amount of salicylates that will be consumed by the residents of Mentia be equal to minium theurapatic dose required? The theuraptic dose of a given compound is usually much higher than the amount that is added as food additive. It may be the case that alot of companies may use other compounds instead of salicyates as flavor additives in their food products. It may also not be possible to add salicylates as food additives to a lot of products beacuse of their reaction with other compounds in the product such as iodine in iodine fortified salts supplied to areas with an high prevalance of goitre( iodine deficency is major cause for goitre) and Mentia may be an area requiring iodine fortified salts .It may be the case that the taste of salicylates be not being suitable for a given product . If any of the arguments is true , it seriously weakens the prediction.

Secondly , Do the people of Mentia eat a lot fresh food instead of processed food with additives? It is very likely Mentia is a rural area where people take a diet consting of mostly fresh food. It is also plausible that the only a small miniority of the whole population eat the processed food in which the food companies put salcicylates. If any of the above argument is proven to be true than the prediction may not hold water.

Lastly , Is the mentioned study scientifically done and is realible? It is possible that the sample taken in the study note be enough and not representative of the whole population. It may be possible that there are other confounding factors such as lifestyle changes , other chemical compounds , new advanvced screen on electronic devices( which do not put strain on the eyes hence resulting in less headaches ) which may not be taken into account and would have affected the results of the study. It may possible that study participants were not able or were not willing to follow the instructions given to them for such a large time peroid and were using other medications or measures such as resting ( according to research , resting usually helps in relieving headaches). If any of the arguments proved to be true , it seriouslly affects the base on which the assumptions stands.

In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able answer the three questions above and offer more evidence (perhaps in a form of systematic study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the prediction of further decrease in headaches in the residents of Mentai.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2405.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 490.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90816326531 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83744040783 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483673469388 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 95.3846564547 57.8364921388 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.578947368 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7894736842 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.25449101796 419% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131440177831 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446478700192 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536907982346 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806614447169 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523498813733 0.0628817314937 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 490 350
No. of Characters: 2356 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.705 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.808 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.759 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.789 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.606 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5