The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president."In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Int

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The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.

"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries makes a recommendation that preventing employees from accessing internet from their workstations will ultimately lead to increase in overall profit for the company. However, while the conclusion drawn by the vice president may hold water, it rests on several unfounded assumptions, if not substatiated, dramaically weaken the persusivness of the argument. Thus, the 3 questions must be addressed.

Firstly, How do the employees use the internet connection on their workstations? Nowadays, it is a difficult task to work without the aid of internet. The employees maybe using the connection to world wide web for researching for their work, troubleshooting their issues, communcating with their colleagues in and out of their workplace. Banning internet access will most likely result in detoratiation in quality of work and an increase in time consumed to complete the work. If any of the above statements are true, it weakens the conclusion.

Secondly, How much of the time spent on the internet is spent on non -work related activities? 10 minutes spent in every 2 hours or so is not likely to be determinal to work , by contrast, research show that a break after every 90 mins is important to prevent burnout and increase efficency. It would also help reduce mental stress and help his refresh his mind. If any of the above statements proves to be substainial, then the conclusion’s validity is greatly reduced.

Finally, How did the vice president reach to this conclusion? He does not cite data from a systemic research study or for that matter, any data from any source. This conclusion appears to be based on vice president’s own observations and could be biased from own views and belief. If any of the above statements are true, then the conclusion appears to be flimsy at best.

The recommendation made by the vice prersident that probhiting internet access from work computers will lead to increase in overall profit for the company is false. It is based on several unproved assumptions, which severly weaken the the recommendation. The author must present reasons and evidence(perhaps in form of systemic study) for 3 questions so that validity of the recommendation can be proven.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21798365123 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17767863095 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514986376022 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.0990958604 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.789473684 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0937605106086 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0285706580235 0.0743258471296 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437259703941 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0589816006016 0.128457276422 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522681706786 0.0628817314937 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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