Recently on the memorandum from the manager of the television station has stated that there has been increase in the complain regarding the decrease time of the local news and weather; thus, it has caused in the decrease in the number of advertisement that we used to recieve during our previous schedule. Thus, the manager has decided to restore the previous timing inorder to avoid losing the adverstising revenue. Although, the manager is probably correct regarding the reports, I believe that he is too quick to assume that the station will be in loss only by the lose of the advertising revenues; he has failed to address the additional revenue that the station might get from the other programs that they have just been launched.
First and foremost, the manager assumes that the adverstisment from the local news have great contribution on the revenue of the station. However with the assumption there is a presumption that the revenue might not have a great effect on the station; thus, depending only on the revenue of the adverstisemnts won't be enough to validate his conclusion. Similarly, the manager assumes that the complain from the people regarding the local news is much high but there hasn't mentioned any thing about the number of complains and how reliable the complains actually were. Probably, the complain were all dummy calls from the other people or their competitors as such tricks are being done now and then.
The station manager need to check for the validity of the complains and the total revenue generated by the adverstisement. Similarly, the manager fails to mention the overall review of the station, especially regarding the number of increase in the audience and rise in TRP, thus it will be quick to assume that his station is in loss. For example, as technology has been so advanced that the basic knowledge of the weather can be seen from every mobile; thus, making the validity of the news report in question. Probably the broadcast of national news might attract audience from the other states too; thus increasing the over all viewers of the station.
The manager should look for the other various ways that could be incorporated to rise the reveneue othet than weather reports. Similarly, various talk shows can be introduced that will attract more adverstisement that local news and weather.
To sum up, the conclusion made by the manager depending on the fallacies provided ia unwarranted and Ibelieve that he is too rash to believe make such conclusion without the detail study of the fallacies. Thus, only by studying such fallacies can the station manager made warranted conclusion
Recently on the memorandum from the manager of the television station has stated that there has been increase in the complain regarding the decrease time of the local news and weather; thus, it has caused in the decrease in the number of advertisement that we used to recieve during our previous schedule. Thus, the manager has decided to restore the previous timing inorder to avoid losing the adverstising revenue. Although the manager is probably correct regarding the reports, I believe that he is too quick to assume that the station will be in loss only by the lose of the advertising revenues; he has failed to address the additional revenue that the station might get from the other programs that they have just been launched.
First and foremost, the manager assumes that the adverstisment from the local news have great contribution on the revenue of the station. However with the assumption there is a presumption that the revenue might not have a great effect on the station; thus, depending only on the revenue of the adverstisemnts won't be enough to validate his conclusion. Similarly, the manager assumes that the complain from the people regarding the local news is much high but there hasn't mentioned any thing about the number of complains and how reliable the complains actually were. Probably, the complain were all dummy calls from the other people or their competitors as such tricks are being done now and then.
The station manager need to check for the validity of the complains and the total revenue generated by the adverstisement. Similarly, the manager fails to mention the overall review of the station, especially regarding the number of increase in the audience and rise in TRP, thus it will be quick to assume that his station is in loss. For example, as technology has been so advanced that the basic knowledge of the weather can be seen from every mobile; thus, making the validity of the news report in question. Probably the broadcast of national news might attract audience from the other states too; thus increasing the over all viewers of the station.
The manager should look for the other various ways that could be incorporated to rise the reveneue othet than weather reports. Similarly, various talk shows can be introduced that will attract more adverstisement that local news and weather.
To sum up, the conclusion made by the manager depending on the fallacies provided ia unwarranted and Ibelieve that he is too rash to believe make such conclusion without the detail study of the fallacies. Thus, only by studying such fallacies can the station manager made warranted conclusion
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 441 350
No. of Characters: 2155 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.583 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.887 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.594 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.382 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.933 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.404 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.642 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... stated that there has been increase in the complain regarding the decrease time of the loca...
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Line 1, column 564, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...hat the station will be in loss only by the lose of the advertising revenues; he has fai...
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Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ribution on the revenue of the station. However with the assumption there is a presumpt...
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Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...on. Similarly, the manager assumes that the complain from the people regarding the local new...
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Line 5, column 467, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...g the local news is much high but there hasnt mentioned any thing about the number of...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 483, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
... is much high but there hasnt mentioned any thing about the number of complains and how r...
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Line 5, column 579, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... the complains actually were. Probably, the complain were all dummy calls from the other peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, look, regarding, similarly, so, then, thus, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2210.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03416856492 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65512591011 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46013667426 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.2111101927 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.333333333 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2666666667 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452883665422 0.218282227539 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155187208224 0.0743258471296 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.169851819774 0.0701772020484 242% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235280345783 0.128457276422 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.167440227427 0.0628817314937 266% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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