Reduce the accidents on Balmer island
The letter to the editor of the balmer island Gazette states that in order to reduce the accidents on balmer island, the moped rental companies need to reduce the sale off mopeds. The argument seems to be fallacious, and for the argument to be logical, the author need to answer the following 3 questions.
First of all, do the significant number of 100,000 visitors during summer months actually use mopeds for their transportation? perhaps, the majority of tourists rent cars, ride bicycles or use taxi services like uber. it is possible that the most of the moped accidents are due to the local residents who live on the island year round.
Secondly, if mopeds are popular for the summer tourists, are they obtaining them from the rental services? perhaps, many of the tourists during the summer months own mopeds and use them for transportation.
Next, is the 50-moped per day being met right now? perhaps currently the moped rental companies are only renting on average 20 mopeds per day and thus lowering the limit to 25 would have little or no effect on the number of accidents.
Finally, noticing that this policy was successful in Seaville’s town, will it also have desired result on balmer island. perhaps the two island are drastically different in their geographic conditions, the number of tourists visiting each year and traffic. The successful policy in Seaville might not be applicable in balmer island.
To conclude, the author made illogical conclusion and for the argument to be sound and cogent, he needs to answer the questions mentioned above.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 262 350
No. of Characters: 1271 1500
No. of Different Words: 139 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.023 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.851 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.503 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.017 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.432 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.87 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...ly use mopeds for their transportation? perhaps, the majority of tourists rent cars, ri...
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Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...icycles or use taxi services like uber. it is possible that the most of the moped ...
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Line 9, column 108, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...btaining them from the rental services? perhaps, many of the tourists during the summer...
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Line 9, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mopeds and use them for transportation. Next, is the 50-moped per day being met ...
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Line 13, column 52, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...e 50-moped per day being met right now? perhaps currently the moped rental companies ar...
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Line 13, column 236, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r no effect on the number of accidents. Finally, noticing that this policy was s...
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Line 17, column 127, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...o have desired result on balmer island. perhaps the two island are drastically differen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1337.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 262.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10305343511 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66434085587 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557251908397 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 705.55239521 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9991781629 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.846153846 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84615384615 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257754089381 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921467920443 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.159536502103 0.0701772020484 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118360360155 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150195985868 0.0628817314937 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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