In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author wants to convince the readers that the obesity rate of the city will soon fall down below the national average. This argument may look convincing at first look, but it is filled with questionable assumptions and vague evidences.
One of the biggest assumptions that the author is making is that exercise is the sole factor determining healthier lifestyles and obesity. The recent survey conducted focusses on the city residents and observations are made on increasing number of 'daily walks'. But is the population increase taken into consideration while making these obervations? It might happen that the rate of population increase may exceed the rate of increase in the 'daily walks'. Moreover, are the walkers the same people taken walks twice in a day? This evidence is missing from the argument.
The author mentions the closing of few gymnasiums but a full attendance in sports complexes and gymnasiums during some seasons. Here there is not a mention of number of sports complexes and gyms being shut down as well as opena, and the closing down of gyms may be due to the inactivity of those gyms. The full attendance may be observed not because of the healthy habits of residents but because of a less number of functional gyms. Moreover, a full attendance is seen only during some seasons, what about the other seasons?
Finally, the author predicts that the obesity rate of Slimville city residents would fall below the national average. But is exercise the only factor determining obesity in a person? If a person exercises daily for sometime and eats voraciously, beyond the required calories, his daily exercise wont help him in loosing weight.
In general, all these points call out for some missing evidences, which if they would have been present, would have made this argument a convincing one.
Comments
e-rater score report
Out of topic.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 303 350
No. of Characters: 1485 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.172 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.901 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.575 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.456 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.31 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 328, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ercise wont help him in loosing weight. In general, all these points call out fo...
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Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...l out for some missing evidences, which if they would have been present, would hav...
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Line 5, column 81, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
...r some missing evidences, which if they would have been present, would have made this argument ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, may, moreover, so, well, while, in general, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1522.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 303.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02310231023 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65071775387 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511551155116 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4196213885 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.125 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9375 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3125 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0844078710155 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0275727740955 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389086790402 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0450685736446 0.128457276422 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.015084522447 0.0628817314937 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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