In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
The author of the contex provide some information about the situation of the Mason City. He maintain cleaning the Mason River would eliminate the smell of the river and due to interests of inhabitants of the city to water sport, the city government should assigen budget for these activites. The reasons provided by tha author look persuasive at the first glance, but when delve deeper into the provided reason, his reasoning is rife of holes and assumptions that should be clarified by author. I could not accept the statemnet as it is dut to three reason and I will explain now. First of all, the writer maintained that city dewllers are interested to water sports while he did not mention any survey, study or additional information to support his claim. Even he maintain according the study, it si possible that the study would has some holes. For instance, it should be clear that how many people inquery for this question. Is the survey hold according scientific manners. Besides, it is possible that people like to do water sport in their holiday outside the city. In addition, liking water sport does not mean they can do these activities. it is possible that due to their conomic situation they do not afford the expenses of water sports. Another possibility is that they may just like to watch water sport on TV or other media not do themselves. Another reason that provide is that the state has annonced a plan to clean up the river and would be removed. It could not be necessaarily correct. The author did not provide information about the origin of the smell. The smell could be from industries and factories that domp their waste water in the river. Therefore, claen up the river would not remove the smell because the main cause of the odor remained unchanged. Also, it is just an annoncement and it is possible that the government cancel it due to political issue or lack of budget. Lastly, the author assumed that the budget of the city government is unlimited and the city does not have any financial limitaion. Although this assumption may hold true, The writer did not present any additional information to prove that. A possible situation is that the city governmnet could not provide funds for this purpose unless cut down some funds in other projects in construction or health. in this situation, it may not reasonable to provide funds for the aforemnetioned project. In summary, clean up the river and eliminating the smell could be helpful for the city and attract turists. However, the writer could not provide cogent information to presuade the reader that
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 22 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 444 350
No. of Characters: 2102 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.59 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.734 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.495 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.643 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.305 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'maintains'.
Suggestion: maintains
...out the situation of the Mason City. He maintain cleaning the Mason River would eliminat...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 767, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'maintains'.
Suggestion: maintains
...formation to support his claim. Even he maintain according the study, it si possible tha...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 833, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...dy, it si possible that the study would has some holes. For instance, it should be ...
^^^
Line 1, column 1149, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... not mean they can do these activities. it is possible that due to their conomic s...
^^
Line 1, column 2303, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...her projects in construction or health. in this situation, it may not reasonable t...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, lastly, look, may, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in summary, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2141.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82207207207 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56840807327 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459459459459 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1546667733 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2083333333 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18865455329 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546410502254 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645892000876 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18865455329 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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