In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is, therefore, sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
The author claims that use of the flowing water of Mason River for water sport is sure to increase so the city government should devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities. To support the conclusion, he cites various evidences. Although these evidences appear to bolster the argument, a meticulous analysis will show otherwise. So the author needs to cite the following specific evidences to make the argument more sound.
1) The physical structure of the river.
First of all the author assumes that the physical structure of the Mason River is suitable for the water supports. It is possible that the physical structure of the river is extremely vertical so that the boating and swimming is extremely hard. If this was the case, then devoting money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities will be unwarranted.
2) The purity of flowing water in Mason river.
Second of all, the author presumes that, just cleaning up the water and removing smell of the water will increase the use of the water for recreational facilities. Perhaps, the water in the river in mixed with lead and other harmful chemicals. It is possible that, the water in the Mason river is very toxic for the human body. If this was the case, then the author's conclusion becomes unjustified and specious.
3) The location of the Mason river.
Third of all, the writer presumes that the location of the Mason river lies on the place where ever people easily convey. Perhaps, the road condition to go to the Mason river is considerable bad and very risky to commute even if it flows through the city. If this was the case then the government money to riverside recreational facilities in not appropriate and doesn't hold water.
In conclusion, it is possible that.. However, as it stands now, the author's argument relies on three unfounded assumptions which render the argument unpersuasive at best and specious at worst. Thus, the author needs to provide the specific evidences on three fronts: the physical structure of the river, the purity of flowing water in Mason river, the location of the Mason river.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 359 350
No. of Characters: 1724 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.802 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.572 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.2 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.598 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e flowing water of Mason River for water sport is sure to increase so the city go...
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Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... government should devote more money in this years budget to riverside recreational ...
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Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...is was the case, then devoting money in this years budget to riverside recreational ...
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Line 7, column 360, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...an body. If this was the case, then the authors conclusion becomes unjustified and spec...
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Line 11, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to go to the Mason river is considerable bad and very risky to commute even if it...
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Line 11, column 365, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ional facilities in not appropriate and doesnt hold water. In conclusion, it is pos...
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Line 13, column 35, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...r. In conclusion, it is possible that.. However, as it stands now, the authors ...
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Line 13, column 69, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e that.. However, as it stands now, the authors argument relies on three unfounded assu...
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Line 13, column 348, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... purity of flowing water in Mason river, the location of the Mason river.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, then, third, thus, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97765363128 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63047230333 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435754189944 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.8103216543 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263495694954 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883804609241 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830403012148 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148129180965 0.128457276422 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530923415059 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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