In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river’s water and the river’s smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year’s budget to riverside recreational facilities.
In given memo author describes about most popular recreational facilities in a particular city and provides his opinion about why the mason river is not being used by people for those activities.He thinks the reason behind that is the cleanliness of that river and if government invests some amount in maintainance of that river would definitely help in increased use of river for recreational activities
author states that the residents are complaining about the river's smell and cleanliness.Here an author is somehow misguiding us hinting that these people are those who are up voting sports activities as popular recreational facilities but these can be the people residents of mason city who are living near mason river and are facing health issues or not feeling comfortable.This is not being taken into consideration but directly related to less use of mason river.
there are some questions which author must take into consideration that there can be some safety issues because of which people are showing unwillingness towards the use of mason river for sportsactivities.For performing sports activities like boating,swimming or fishing we need to have safety guards like life jacket,tube etc.Because of unavailability of such things people might be reluctant to the mason river.Nowadays there are many clubs who are providing these sports activities along with these
safety guards and also there is always a safety instructor who keeps an eye on people and taking care of them.So because of safety concerns also people might feel insecure to use mason river for recreational facilities.Government must not ignore the problems which might occur if there is increase in use of mason river which can be water pollution
So to finally conclude the reasons for the fact that mason river is hardly being used by people for recreational facilities can be safety issues,pollution,more facilities etc.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 5 15
No. of Words: 313 350
No. of Characters: 1586 1500
No. of Different Words: 149 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.206 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.067 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.737 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 62.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.184 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.622 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 1 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.389 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eational facilities can be safety issues,pollution,more facilities etc.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 301.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35215946844 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30641404166 2.78398813304 119% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481727574751 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 19.7664670659 10% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 150.0 22.8473053892 657% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.5 57.8364921388 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 805.5 119.503703932 674% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 150.5 23.324526521 645% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.0 5.70786347227 228% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254329964292 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216801773188 0.0743258471296 292% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482096791538 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163133513804 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044438675067 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 79.0 14.3799401198 549% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -89.23 48.3550499002 -185% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 63.0 12.197005988 517% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.93 12.5979740519 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 14.07 8.32208582834 169% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 98.500998004 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 62.0 12.3882235529 500% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 62.0 11.1389221557 557% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 62.0 11.9071856287 521% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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