In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is, therefore, sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Owing to residents' long-term complains about the quality of Mason river’s water and its smell which flows through Mason City, the government should devote more money to clean up it and to maintain riverside recreational facilities so that use of the river for water sports will be sure to increase. Is it true if this was done in this way? Carefully considering the survey, there are some details to be questioned: residents' favorite recreational activities, the river rarely used for water sports and the city park department devoting little money to maintaining recreational facilities along the river, and residents’ complaints about the river’s water quality and smell.
First of all, is the survey made in a realistic and scientific way? Is the result from the investigation credible? Is it outdated, cryptic, or even useless? In fact, an investigation needs a careful plan in a scientific, systematic manner to obtain the first-hand data from the reality, so that it can be used for researchers' analysis and concerned organization’s reference. Suppose that the survey was only from a water-sport business, who interviewed the minority of residents along the river, and the asked questions were about water sports such as swimming, boating and fishing, not other recreational programs. Obviously, this investigation is full of dubious aspects: are these residents representative? are they really interested in the above-mentioned sports? does the river has no other use for local residents, except for water sports? As a water-sport recreational business, the designed investigation may be based on its own benefits, which, after all, is the top concern of it——the investment-benefit synthetical analysis, the result of which will be important for the business to make the decision of opening up recreational activities along Mason River. Moreover, was this survey made a few years ago or longer time? If did, it would lose its value for today’s reference. A new investigation may be necessary for the authorities to invest cleaning up the river.
Another question is that the city park department devoted little money to maintaining recreational facilities along the river. Above all, it should be sure whether Mason City has enough money to distribute such program or not. If Mason City was less developed, the government money would have invested in industrial field and the basic necessities of the public, not to mention such recreational facilities. So, money, as the key factor for any project, has become the problem for the city park department to continue investing this project——which also may mean that the investment in recreational facilities would not bring about good returns. Furthermore, has the city changed its development project? In China, the majority of city parks have become free-fee places where have become the open place for recreation and entertainment of the public at any time, either on weekends or on workdays. Therefore, such the place like Mason river has been prohibited from profitable programs, and another possibility is that if the city park department had little finance from other sources, naturally these recreational facilities would not be kept regular repairment.
Lastly, have the residents been complaints about the quality of the river’s water and the river’s smell for years? Why does the river become so notorious? Why has the government ignored the residents’ complaints for many years? First of all, who collected and published residents’ complaints? And for many years, how many residents have lodged their complaints to the local government? Perhaps, there are only a few people who did? And these complaints may have passed a few years. Now the government may rarely have received such complaints. Secondly, what makes the quality of the river’s water become so bad and smell so stinky? This must be made clear. Only really knowing the reason of the problem, can people find a solution to deal with it. If the river was of such characteristic of large numbers of microbe live at the bottom of the river which emit extreme repulsive smell, for these, it would be difficult to get rid of them unless the city completely changes the environment of water body. The other sources may be the pollution of industry and residents' life. As is known, nowadays the industrial pollution in city is very serious, especially in China, which has been the top target of public criticism. Many enterprises, like food, chemistry, discharge large amounts of waste water and waste residues, which have produced severe damage to the city’s water body, and even causing the pollution of the whole water sources. Certain plague may also produce long-term influence on the water body. For instance, Mason City had outbroken swine plague many years ago, and since then the Mason river has been emitted a kind of nasty smell because of the pests resulting in microbes multiplying with giving off such gases as ammonia, a kind of notorious gas. So, for governments, they may be at a loss what to do at present.
In short, whether the government should use its limit finance to Mason river’s recreational facilities or not depends on the amount of its money, the necessity of city development project, and the investment-return ratio. And it should also make clear whether the residents’ complaints are true or not. If the government financed to clean up Mason river and the water-sport program, would it really attract people to come here for entertainment? A careful new planning and investigation are needed before doing this above-mentioned decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, lastly, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, after all, except for, for instance, in fact, in short, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.6327345309 194% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 11.1786427146 277% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 104.0 55.5748502994 187% => OK
Nominalization: 40.0 16.3942115768 244% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4770.0 2260.96107784 211% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 902.0 441.139720559 204% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28824833703 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.48026594568 4.56307096286 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10583977006 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 379.0 204.123752495 186% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420177383592 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1488.6 705.55239521 211% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 6.0 0.471057884232 1274% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 10.0 1.67365269461 597% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 44.0 19.7664670659 223% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.5949661749 57.8364921388 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.409090909 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34090909091 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 19.0 6.88822355289 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
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Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355069330524 0.218282227539 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794270967676 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751234788513 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234450919623 0.128457276422 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0747841475618 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 207.0 98.500998004 210% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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