The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette."The population on Balmer Island doubles during the summer months. During the summer, then, the town council of Balmer Island should decrease the maximum number of moped rentals

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"The population on Balmer Island doubles during the summer months. During the summer, then, the town council of Balmer Island should decrease the maximum number of moped rentals allowed at each of the island's six moped and bicycle rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day. This will significantly reduce the number of summertime accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. The neighboring island of Torseau actually saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents last year when Torseau's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals. To help reduce moped accidents, therefore, we should also enforce these limitations during the summer months."

The author in the letter advocates the limitations of the number of moped on Balmer Island, which people believe will reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, just as the neighboring island of Torseau did, where the moped accidents had a 50 percent reduction last year. Based on the arguments offered, however, the expected result seems to hardly be achieved, since the assumptions on which the arguments rest are problematic.

One assumption is that the growing population in the summer definitely cause the accidents of moped on Balmer Island. If people all drive moped safely and orderly, traffic accidents will not rise. Meanwhile, the majority of people take public transportation like bus, a means more convenient and cheaper, so traffic problems on Balmer Island may be the same as before. After all, economy and safety are the top priority people travel. Moreover, the population on Balmer Island doubles during the summer months. How much are two folds on earth? If the figure starts from a low base, the restriction may be dispensable. Make sure that the correlation between the change of population and mope accidents on Balmer Island, or the reduction of mope accidents will be unfeasible.

Another implicit assumption is that reducing the number of mopeds, from the maximum number of 50 per day to 30 per day of each of six moped rental companies, certainly decreases the number of moped accidents on Balmer Island. There is a big question——the fewer mopeds, the fewer moped accidents. Will thirty per day for each rental company ensure the relatively low moped accidents? If moped drivers recklessly run on the roads, moped accidents will still occur or increase no matter how many mopeds. Perhaps local people instead of outsiders drive their own mopeds regardless of traffic rules, leading to the serious moped accidents. In the end, it is useless to reduce the number of moped accidents by a restriction on moped rentals.

Additionally, each of the island's six moped and bicycle rental companies will be demanded to decrease the number of moped rentals. Will these enterprisers agree to the practice? Impossible. They may well take full advantage of the summer holidays(the golden times for them) to develop their business rather than lose such opportunity. For this the rental companies may violently oppose the policy, not only because of the development of business, but because of the unwarranted charge: the number of moped rented does not decide that of moped accidents. So, it is necessary to analyze the negative influence of such limitation on relative industries like rental companies.

Last but not least, the author introduces the neighboring island of Torseau as a role model, where the moped accidents reduced 50 percent last year after having implemented similar limits on moped rentals. Are both places comparable? Often the same policy may produce varied effects on different districts in view of divergent conditions. For instance, traffic conditions and facilities on Balmer Island are far superior to that of Torseau, the number of moped accidents on Balmer Island will hardly decline even if the authority limits the number of moped rented, because other factors like the inclement weather of cyclone also can cause the accidents in summer. Ensure whether both places have the same situations before introducing a role model Torseau.

In a nutshell, the information offered is insufficient to uphold the predicted result of limiting the number of moped rented, which conversely may produce unexpected negative influence on the economic development of Balmer Island.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, while, after all, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 55.5748502994 144% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3067.0 2260.96107784 136% => OK
No of words: 582.0 441.139720559 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26975945017 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91168771031 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77464171527 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 204.123752495 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472508591065 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 973.8 705.55239521 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.471057884232 637% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.3036996422 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.592592593 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.62962962963 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319091201835 0.218282227539 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097887901258 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127014719752 0.0701772020484 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185226012042 0.128457276422 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591647343607 0.0628817314937 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 98.500998004 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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