"Traffic here in Waymarsh is becoming a problem. Although just three years ago a state traffic survey showed that the typical driving commuter took 20 minutes to get to work, the commute now takes closer to 40 minutes, according to the survey just completed. Members of the town council already have suggested more road building to address the problem, but as well as being expensive, the new construction will surely disrupt some of our residential neighborhoods. It would be better to follow the example of the nearby city of Garville. Last year Garville implemented a policy that rewards people who share rides to work, giving them coupons for free gas. Pollution levels in Granville have dropped since the policy was implemented, and people from Garville tell me that commuting times have fallen considerably. There is no reason why a policy like Garville's shouldn't work equally well in Waymarsh."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
According to the letter, waymarsh should implement a series of different traffic policy like Garville given that Garvllie solves the traffic jam problem, makes the commuting times fall considerably, and even decrease the pollution levels in Garville. we need more evidence about investigating the density of citizens living in waymarsh, giving more details of the status of people in the city, and eliminating any other causes for the decreasing pollution in waymarsh to decide whether these assumptions are correct or not.
First, the article suggests that a policy that people should share rides to work in garville also can be conducted in waymarsh. we doubt whether the density of population in these two different city is the same, also the number of cars in different cities. For instance, In garville most of people live in a place where is very close to each other, but in waymarsh only a few people live in the place where is close to other people, it is hard to take the measure that the people in the city share rides.
Second, waymarsh learns from garville to give the citizens living in the city coupons for free gas. If all the people living in the city have high living quality, Adoptting such measure can be helpful to the traffic situation, otherwise, it will be ineffective. Assuming that some persons who live in a low living quality will take advantage of such a great policy only for car fuel, which will cause the traffic worsen .Before providing coupons for free gas to the people, the government should have more detail information of the citizens.
Finally, the article also mentions that pollution levels in Garville have a decrease after the traffic is carried out. we can’t have difficulty in finding a few potential reasons for this situation. For example, the government of Garville closes some pollute factories during the time of the traffic policy to be conducted. only by observing the essence of things, we will not be deceived by the superficial phenomenon.
In conclusion, it is necessary to provide more evidence discussed above about investigating the density of citizens living in waymarsh, giving more details of the status of people in the city, and eliminating other possibilities for the dropping pollution in Waymarsh to make a strong argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 382 350
No. of Characters: 1869 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.421 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.893 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.586 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 38.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.686 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.437 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.721 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.165 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 252, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...rease the pollution levels in Garville. we need more evidence about investigating ...
^^
Line 2, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...ille also can be conducted in waymarsh. we doubt whether the density of population...
^^
Line 2, column 283, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...erent cities. For instance, In garville most of people live in a place where is very close to ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...uel, which will cause the traffic worsen .Before providing coupons for free gas to...
^^
Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Before
...l, which will cause the traffic worsen .Before providing coupons for free gas to the p...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 119, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...rease after the traffic is carried out. we can't have difficulty in finding a...
^^
Line 4, column 329, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Only
... of the traffic policy to be conducted. only by observing the essence of things, we ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 382.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02356020942 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68259729099 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460732984293 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.5658628956 57.8364921388 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.615384615 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3846153846 23.324526521 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0663953592193 0.218282227539 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0274495000436 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293736860688 0.0701772020484 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0425451776506 0.128457276422 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275462870247 0.0628817314937 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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