"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
dr. field an anthropologist twenty years ago cocnluded based on his observations that children in tertia are reared by the entire village rather than just the parents. now the author here contadicts dr. field’s observation based approach by giving a interview centred method.he supports his argument with the fact that when he interviewed children in group of islands alonwith tertia he found that children talk more about their parentsrather than other adults of the village.However there are certain flaws in the authors argument.
Firstly the author has predicted that since the children are not talking much about other adults of the village child rearing is mainly done by there biological parents.It is not necessary that the one’s who are not talked much about have no role in helping.also the author has not clearly stated that other adults of village were not completely mentioned in the interview, maybe other persons were not talked much but the kids had praised or acknowledged them in their interview.other than these there is no clarification about how these interview was conducted and how many children were included in these interview and how was there mature or mindset during the interview.If only a small fraction of children are interviewed than chances of these interview centered approach to be accurate are very less.
also the questions asked during the interview are very important.If the children are asked major amount of questions related to there biological parents they might not be able to mention others in there answers or hypothetically the role of other adults in village was nowhere questioned.The author has mentioned that dr. field concluded these observation twenty years ago, now twenty years is a long time and many things can change.Probably due to some disputes among the villagers the child rearing tradition has become extinct and now children are primarily reared by biological parents only.
Finally I would like to conclude that author can’t prove his method superior than other method but denying other methods conclusion twenty years ago and also there are certain flaws in authors argument which the author needs to resolve before concluding anything based on his method.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 362 350
No. of Characters: 1850 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.362 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.11 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.6 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 51.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.572 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.461 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.731 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 356.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30337078652 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81244730905 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494382022472 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 50.0 22.8473053892 219% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 224.215093522 57.8364921388 388% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 269.714285714 119.503703932 226% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 50.8571428571 23.324526521 218% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292590796189 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159352041682 0.0743258471296 214% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126548429686 0.0701772020484 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186120679666 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111990822821 0.0628817314937 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.0 14.3799401198 202% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 12.27 48.3550499002 25% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.0 12.197005988 197% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.35 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.0 11.1389221557 198% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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