in any field of endeavor,it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within the field.
The authors argument here is that it is impossible to make significant contribution without being influenced by past achievements however , there can be various other factors alongwith getting influenced by past achievements which can inspire to contribute in certain field.
The main factor which drives to contribute is the intertest involved in a certain field which is not necessarily because of past achievements in that field. when people are intrested in certain fields they tend to achieve some unprecedented milestones. The pure example of these can be seen in the fields of sports and science and technology where people have went on to set a benchmark for others without any strong achievements to look from the past.
I also agree that when something outstanding is achieved it certainly influences a lot of people and it makes people to start working in that direction. Although I would say it is not necessary to have examples to contribute sometimes people do things out of curiosity or for there personal interests and even as there prime duty, these type of people are also major achievers if they work diligently. there is always someone who sets the benchmarks for others to follow and he probably has noone to get boost from in his work. For example the first guy who reached the peak of Himalaya or the first person to land on moon they had no one to follow yet they succeded in there targets, but surely after that a lot of people where motivated to do to what they achieved.
Finally I would like to conclude that achievements of past do push to enter the field and contribute but it is not impossible to succeed in the fields where no one has a major achievement. Otherwise there won’t have been any development in new fields where there has been no major contributer in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors argument here is that it is impossible ...
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Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... influenced by past achievements however , there can be various other factors alon...
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Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...use of past achievements in that field. when people are intrested in certain fields ...
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Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “when” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...use of past achievements in that field. when people are intrested in certain fields ...
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Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[6]
Message: Note: went is a past participle of "wend". Did you mean 'gone' (past participle of "go")?
Suggestion: gone
...cience and technology where people have went on to set a benchmark for others withou...
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Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mes people do things out of curiosity or for there personal interests and even as...
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Line 5, column 404, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...ajor achievers if they work diligently. there is always someone who sets the benchmar...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...tivated to do to what they achieved. Finally I would like to conclude that achieveme...
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Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...s where no one has a major achievement. Otherwise there won't have been any developm...
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Line 7, column 312, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... been no major contributer in the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, so, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 2235.4752809 68% => OK
No of words: 312.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83974358974 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77649569322 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 215.323595506 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512820512821 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.0908048638 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.0 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2 23.4991977007 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381952053617 0.243740707755 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1598838464 0.0831039109588 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122351569057 0.0758088955206 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270789136558 0.150359130593 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128573513067 0.0667264976115 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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