“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This
research of mine proves that Dr. Field’s conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how
In the article, Dr. Karp argues that the conclusion of Dr.field, that states that children in tertia island is brought up by all of village rather than their own natural parents, is completely wrong. The author came with this conclusion based on his latest interviews with children in this island which shows that these children spend more time talking about their biological parents than other. Also, this conclusion is supported by interview-centered approach that done by his graduate students that establish a deep understanding about children rearing nature there and in other island cultures. In order to discuss what evidences are needed to evaluate the argument, three pieces of evidences should be examined.
First of all, the author suggests that because the children spent much time talking about their biological parents, it means that they were brought up by them. However, This may not be accurate as their talking about their parents comes from the possibility that they are yearning to their parents and curious to know about them. If this scenario is right then the argument is weakened.
Secondly, the author states that this conclusion is strengthened by the interviews held by his students with children on the island without providing statistics or the questions used. So there is a possibility that the percentages of the children who were interviewed are less than 50% therefore it won't be an accurate survey. Another possibility that his graduate students may not be expert enough to set optimal questions to help in this conclusion. For example, one of the questions may be something like "do you like your biological parents more than other people in the island?" However naturally humans tend to love their parents more than others even if they never see them. If any of the above is valid then the whole argument is not hold water.
Finally, Dr. Karp said that the interview-based approach help him to understand the rearing methods in Tertia island and other ones. Is that imply that part of children who participate in the survey are from other islands? if the answer is yes, it may be the case that major of children in the survey were from other islands. Thus, the results of this approach cannot be accurate. If the pervious is true then the whole conclusion falls down.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed due to reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide us with more reliable evidence that takes into account the above possible scenarios that weaken the conclusion like missing of information about the percentages of children who are interviewed from Tertia island and questions used. Also, the details like the quality and experience of his students who performed the interviews can be provided to give more insights. If the above evidence are supplied, Then we may be able to consider the possibility of a conclusion.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed due to the reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide us with more reliable evidence besides taking into account the above scenarios that weaken his conclusion. Then we may be able to evaluate the whole argument.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 538 350
No. of Characters: 2658 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.816 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.941 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.679 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 189 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 148 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.417 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.49 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.917 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 331, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...parents and curious to know about them. If this scenario is right then the argumen...
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Line 7, column 693, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...han others even if they never see them. If any of the above is valid then the whol...
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Line 10, column 224, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...e in the survey are from other islands? if the answer is yes, it may be the case t...
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Line 10, column 382, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ts of this approach cannot be accurate. If the pervious is true then the whole con...
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Line 14, column 125, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nce on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide us with m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 28.8173652695 205% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2738.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 537.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09869646182 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76242280465 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.409683426443 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 844.2 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1726035547 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.083333333 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.20833333333 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244841880291 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691869014487 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708425625211 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134837640016 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750485374094 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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