Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than

The author asserts that since his research team gained a result which is against Dr. Field's findings, therefore, Dr. Field's research is wrong. While this argument seems convincing at first glance, there are significant underlying flaws that raise doubt about the author's conclusion.

First of all, the argument unfairly assumes that his interview is more accurate than Dr. Field results while no concrete evidence is offered to substantiate this claim. If Dr. Krap instituted a survey, his poll can be evaluated in two aspects. First,
If his survey was confidential, if not, his results might be distorted. The respondents might provide false information that they believed that the questioners approve of. Second, we are not informed if Dr. Krap created questions or his students. If his students created the questions, they may failed to consider different aspects of evaluation.

In addition, the author claims that since his own result is correct so Dr. Field's results should be invalid while there is no concrete evidence to prove the causality. We are not informed if how many people living in Tertia and how man people contributed to the survey, the accuracy of each research can be evaluated by the proportion of respondents to population. On the other hand, we are not informed about the range of responders' age. Do they both consider the same age range to determine if a person is adult or children?

However, we should consider that Dr. Krap's result might be more precise considering that children attribution change in a new generation. According to the argument, Dr. Field have done this research twenty years ago, it means those children are now parents so the new generation may reject their traditions.

In sum, this author lacks clear evidence to prove his claim. If he were to provide evidence regarding the criteria he considered for comparing his research with Dr. Field's research and the real causality of the claim that Dr. Filed results are invalid his argument might be more convincing.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 264, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...rlying flaws that raise doubt about the authors conclusion. First of all, the argume...
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Line 6, column 461, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of responders age. Do they both consider the same age range to determine if a per...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, while, in addition, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 331.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12990936556 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7070835098 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525679758308 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3710045852 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.125 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139350624732 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486601730006 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370757462063 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0818829938492 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221786366214 0.0628817314937 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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