Of the two leading real estate firms in our town, Adams Realty and Fitch Realty, Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams
The given essay brings out the fact that the Adams sell a house at an average price of $168,000 which is greater than the average price at which Fitch sells, $144,000. 10 years ago, it took 4 months for the Fitch to sell a home while it toook a month to sell a home in Adams last year. As the argument points out, the last time the author has listed his/her home 10 years back, we can not say the same time in the current time or one year back. It might have decreased. Also, the locality where the property located also can significantly effect the time taken to sell the property.
We can not say about the good price based on the average prices. If Finch is selling houses at different ranges, then the average is effected. To illustrate, if Finch sold a house at $10,000 and another house at $270,000 then the average comes to 140,000 but it does not mean your home gets 144,000.
From the previous paragraph, it is is evident that the details provided are not substantial to come to the conclusion. However, if there was a comparison provided about a similar home and in the same time frame, we could have come to a conclusion.
As the number of employees can not decide how fast a deal is made. If the employees at Finch are very good at deal making then the 25 employees could make more sales than the 40 employees at Adams. The revenue is the total income company makes before taking out the expenses, which can not be used to interpret the companies ability to sell a home quickly or at a good price. The revenues of the company and the number of employees does not provide any information that could be used to come to a conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 308 350
No. of Characters: 1303 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.189 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.231 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.21 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 70 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 53 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.384 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.574 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 33, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
... From the previous paragraph, it is is evident that the details provided are n...
^^^^^
Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... could have come to a conclusion. As the number of employees can not decide ...
^^
Line 15, column 68, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...can not decide how fast a deal is made. If the employees at Finch are very good at...
^^
Line 15, column 316, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'companies'' or 'company's'?
Suggestion: companies'; company's
... which can not be used to interpret the companies ability to sell a home quickly or at a ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 2260.96107784 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39413680782 5.12650576532 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30022785412 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491856677524 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0827658748 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3571428571 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78571428571 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0929882066907 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302350899225 0.0743258471296 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425133305852 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0503308739592 0.128457276422 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584913536056 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.3799401198 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 12.5979740519 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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