In the preceding argument, the author claims, humans by getting older are more prone to bone fractures because of decreasing the bone density. The conclusion is based in the premises. Firstly, the author citing a study concluded by taking supplements like twice dose of vitamin D and Calcium daily, will reduce risk of having fractures. Secondly, citing another new study on a group of french old adult women were living in nursing home residents taking double dose from vitamin D and Calcium, with quotidian light physical activity that mitigate the hip fractures incidences among them. However, as more light is shed on the argument and more detailed facts are concerned, it is easy to see that the argument suffers from several grave fallacies in its assumptions as well as commits a false analogy.
To begin with, as mentioned in the argument by citing a study about the cardinal effects of taking double dose from vitamin D and calcium to strengthen bones is not reliable, due to myriad factors such as, firstly, taking these supplements without mentions the ages is a big mistake, in other words, ages play a crucial role in the absorption such materials. For example, the supplements absorption for the mid ages are more than the old adult people, due to presence such a good media for that. So, taking it is not plausible, particularly with the same dose for every age. Moreover, the second vibrant cause is the gender, for further illustrations, there are different chemical compositions between male and female. For instance, in female there are Estrogen and Progesterone as sexual hormones responsible to ameliorate the absorption, while these hormones unavailable in males. Hence, the argument would have been much more convincing if it explicitly stated more details about the study, like age, gender, diet, lifestyle, and diseases.
In addition, the argument is much weakened by re-citing a new study about group of french women in their 80s decade, were living in nursing home. The first flaw is taking a small group from the same age and from the same country to generalize the data over wider segment of people. The second flaw is living in organize place like the nursing home does not reflect the actual lives, that the ordinary people live. In deed, the nursing home has a protocol for serving these people. Thus, if the argument had provided evidences about the second study then it would have been a lot more convincing to the reader.
Finally, the author states because of taking twice dose of supplements and doing light physical activities the French women will get lower risk of broken hip bones among their age. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author’s conclusion in several critical respects, and raises several skeptical questions. For example, what is the rule of the lab tests? are all the French women need the same dose in spite of, the supplement over dose toxicity? what kind of exercises they do?what is the weightlifting that the old adult can bear? how they conclude the result after three years? what about the morbidity and mortality rate among the 80s year old?Without convincing answers to these questions, the reader is left with the impression that the claims made by the author are more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the author’s argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide clear and concrete evidence, perhaps by way of a reliable studies of the vitamin D and Calcium consumption. Finally, to better evaluate the argument it would be necessary to know more information about the previous assumptions.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK. look:
a group of French women in their eighties ...
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 615 350
No. of Characters: 3009 1500
No. of Different Words: 281 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.98 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.893 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.52 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 218 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 163 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.739 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.889 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.783 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.488 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.068 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 347, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...duce risk of having fractures. Secondly, citing another new study on a group of f...
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Line 3, column 377, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'supplements'' or 'supplement's'?
Suggestion: supplements'; supplement's
...rption such materials. For example, the supplements absorption for the mid ages are more th...
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Line 7, column 424, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
...ple, what is the rule of the lab tests? are all the French women need the same dose...
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Line 7, column 516, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
... of, the supplement over dose toxicity? what kind of exercises they do?what is the w...
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Line 7, column 602, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
...ghtlifting that the old adult can bear? how they conclude the result after three ye...
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Line 7, column 650, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
... conclude the result after three years? what about the morbidity and mortality rate ...
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Line 7, column 717, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Without
...d mortality rate among the 80s year old?Without convincing answers to these questions, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as well as, in other words, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3107.0 2260.96107784 137% => OK
No of words: 613.0 441.139720559 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06851549755 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97582523872 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65618095588 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 204.123752495 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486133768352 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 984.6 705.55239521 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.22255489022 284% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9410643801 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.5 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5769230769 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.80769230769 5.70786347227 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216851609517 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547262996038 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624497311767 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11930036426 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636232527888 0.0628817314937 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 98.500998004 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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