The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts
The argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument cogent enough for the fact that it assumes students' contribution to the society during graduate life will have a good impact which is wrong and hence not valid.
Undergraduate and graduate life of a student is very short compared to the whole life of a person. Each step in our life has its own specific time. We cannot assume a child of age 10 is becoming the president of a country and solving the problem of his nation. Student life is the life to gather knowledge, morality and responsibility. It is expected that a student will spend his precious time behind attending classes, doing home works, analyzing the things he learns each day. After completion of student life a student will apply his theoretical knowledge to improve the condition of the society and will help to create a better world. However, if curriculum requires that student should involve in mandatory community service than it may happen that students will not take the thing as mere a contribution to the society. They will consider this contribution as a part of their curriculum, students most of the time do not like coursework, and when the mandatory time ends they will not do such works after completion of graduate life. But our society requires contribution from each and every person and if students remove themselves from such work then our society will face problem.
Secondly, the argument assumes a time period randomly and has not provided any basis of consideration of such time period. Undergraduate life last for four academic years and and graduate life is even much shorter. So, if a student needs to spend nine months of his academic year in an activity which has no direct relation in their future career this will cause harm for the society in turn. Each seconds of life is precious, the faster the student will complete the graduation the faster they will be able to contribute for the society. Had the argument provided any legal basis for the time period it mentioned than the argument would be more valid.
However, the argument mentions that the contribution of the students will remain unpaid. But in order to take the savor of the real world student should face the truth of the real world. They should be paid money for their work and should be allowed to spend their lives with that money. If this can be done they will realize the condition of the people of poor and middle class family.
Finally, the argument mentions that the Dean's office will maintain a list of approved local charities. However, there are many unapproved charities in the society which also require help from the people of the society. If the students are told that they have to serve the charity of the particular area they live then it will be more fruitful.
The argument is flawed because it leaves many unanswered questions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 495 350
No. of Characters: 2342 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.717 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.731 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.457 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.554 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.458 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.521 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 172, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...duate life last for four academic years and and graduate life is even much shorter. So,...
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Line 5, column 415, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...e society in turn. Each seconds of life is precious, the faster the student will c...
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Line 9, column 220, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re help from the people of the society. If the students are told that they have to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2393.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 495.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83434343434 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52902021959 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7955207612 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7083333333 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95833333333 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0909805151737 0.218282227539 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0313723073249 0.0743258471296 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351376502271 0.0701772020484 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0478536228065 0.128457276422 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375640672679 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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