In a recent survey of college graduates, 90 percent agreed that participating in an
internship increased their chances of finding a job after graduation, but last year, only 40
percent of Linford’s graduating art students had completed an internship. Skyway Designs,
located in nearby Linford City, is the perfect company for students to intern with for a
number of reasons: They offer internships in all of their departments, so every student is
sure to find work that they are interested in. Additionally, their internships offer flexible
working hours. Finally, Skyway Designs is known for being one of the best in the design
business, as over 80 percent of businesses in Linford City have used the services of
Skyway Designs for their design needs. Given the vital role that work experience plays in
a student’s success after graduation, we recommend that our art department require all art
students to complete an internship with Skyway Designs before graduation.”
The argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based upon a survey result but details about the survey has not provided , and hence the argument is not cogent enough.
The argument states that, 90% of the graduates agreed that internship was beneficial for finding job and they are the ones who actually earned job. At the same time, the argument states that only 40% of the graduates participated in an internship program. However, it may be possible the survey was conducted on those 40% who participated in the internship program and it appears that even 10% of those graduates denied about the necessity of internship for getting a job which makes the conclusion of the argument vulnerable. Meanwhile, those 60% who did not participate in the intern program might have got job immediately after graduation and the survey did not include them. If this fact is true then it can be said that intern program for those art graduates is not necessary as the argument is emphasizing since almost all the graduates who passed without attending any intern program have managed highly paid job. Had the argument stated in details about the study, only then the argument would be cogent enough.
However, even it is true that intern program is important for getting a job, it is not necessarily true that the graduates have to do their intern in the nearby Skyway company. Primarily because, it may be possible that the city in which the company is located is a small sub-urban city and it is not famous for designs nationally. The argument's justification about that the particular company as a famous one in the city can be countered by the fact that being a small city there is no other well known company and for this fact that company is thriving in the city though is not producing high quality business design. It is possible that companies located in other cities near the university are famous nationally and internationally for their business design and if students do their intern in those companies will learn many things which otherwise they will not learn from Skyway company. Had the argument clearly stated that, Skyway is not only thriving in that city in which it is located but it is famous nationally and internationally only then the conclusion of the argument would be cogent enough.
The argument states that Skyway plays vital role in the success of the graduates in their career but has not provided any evidence on that point. It may be possible that few of the students did their intern program in that company and are yet waiting to get a job while all of their friends are doing job in famous companies. Had the argument stated clearly that those who attended in that company have received attracting job offer only then it can be cogent enough.
The argument is flawed for numerous unwarranted assumptions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 489 350
No. of Characters: 2328 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.702 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.761 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.561 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.202 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.412 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.619 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.172 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...etails about the survey has not provided , and hence the argument is not cogent en...
^^
Line 9, column 337, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
... not famous for designs nationally. The arguments justification about that the particular...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, well, while, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 13.6137724551 213% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2384.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87525562372 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59570657588 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.374233128834 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.0 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.2599036677 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.235294118 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7647058824 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148805678021 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643516048411 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504570573045 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0796044468774 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673751316485 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.