The argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the survey of those students who completed the internship, survey should be taken by all the students of the university, and not only who interested in doing internship. Taken as a whole, there are some assumptions that I am going to discuss in the next paragraphs and these assumptions render the argument highly suspect. Indeed, if these unstated assumptions do not hold true, then the argument totally falls apart.
Firstly, the author states that Skyway Designs Company is located near the Linford city and it offers internship in all departments, so that every student can take the benefit of internship. The author have not mentioned what are the other people's reviews regarding the company other than university's students. It is possible that this is the only company near the Linford City, there may be no other companies in or nearby the city. Also, the author mentions hours are flexible, working hours may be flexible only for full time employees, and not for interns. The author fails to mention the working hours for full time and part time employees.
Secondly, the author mentions that skyway Designs is one of the best design business in Linford, it may be possible that there are no other design companies in the city, so people would eventually go there only. It is the only design company in the city, without any information or evidence, does not mean this is the best. Furthermore, it says that over 80 percent of businesses in Linford City have used the services of
Skyway Designs for their design needs, they might sell their products and services cheaper than others, and also, as I said this is the only design company, so obviously most people go there.
Finally, the author claims that company plays a vital role in student's success after graduation. A student success is based on his or her performance, not on whether the company is good or not. Further, it mentions that all art students complete their internship with Skyway Designs before graduation, it is possible that students would not find the latest designs and technologies there. Careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author’s conclusion in several critical respects, and raises several skeptical questions.
In conclusion, the author’s argument is unpersuasive as it stands.To bolster it further, the author must provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by way of a reliable survey or a detailed analysis that why should students go to Skyway Designs for the internship.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 430 350
No. of Characters: 2116 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.554 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.921 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.528 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.294 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.758 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 521, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... working hours may be flexible only for full time employees, and not for interns. The aut...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 613, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... fails to mention the working hours for full time and part time employees. Secondly, t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 627, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ion the working hours for full time and part time employees. Secondly, the author ment...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 237, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rther, it mentions that all art students complete their internship with Skyway De...
^^
Line 10, column 67, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...s argument is unpersuasive as it stands.To bolster it further, the author must pro...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2183.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 429.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08857808858 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64930285023 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475524475524 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1051319075 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.411764706 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2352941176 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142073541835 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475097632292 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563716161636 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0778183045843 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208311572314 0.0628817314937 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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