The argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on unwarranted assumption that Buckingham's enrollment is growing and by building a number of dormitories in Buckingham College would make prospective students more likely to enroll. Taken as a whole, this unstated assumption render the argument highly suspect. Indeed, if these unwarranted assumption do not hold true then the argument totally falls apart.
Firstly, the author mentions that number of students enrolling in Buckingham college is increasing, so building new dormitories will be helpful for the students and also by looking at the current situation the college is thinking that the students will double in the next 50 years. The author did not mention any information regarding the college, is it new or old, and what is the reason behind increase in number of students, may be it is the first college in the town and nearby area, that is why more children have started to come. The author assumes that the number of students will double in the next 50 years, there is no past record or proof that the number of students will increase in future.
Secondly, the author mentions that the average rent for an apartment in the town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. It may be possible that some students like to live in campus only, because there are many facilities a student gets. Food is main concern, a students easily gets food in hostel, but in apartments it takes time to cook twice or thrice a day, making life more difficult, Some students don't see if the living cost high or low they just want to concentrate on their studies.
Finally, the author also states that attractive new dormitories will likely more students to enroll at Buckingham. A place should be comfortable instead of beautiful and attractive. What if new dormitories will not comfortable according to the needs of students. There is no evidence on the basis of which the author can say that students would like to live in attractive dorms. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provide little credible support to the author's conclusion in several critical respects, and raises several skeptical questions.
In conclusion, the author argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author should provide a concrete evidence. For example: the author did not mention how old is the college, any other college nearby that place.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 416 350
No. of Characters: 2051 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.516 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.93 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.662 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.859 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.58 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
... behind increase in number of students, may be it is the first college in the town and...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 627, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...l double in the next 50 years, there is no past record or proof that the number of...
^^
Line 3, column 693, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...at the number of students will increase in future. Secondly, the author mentions that ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...s a student gets. Food is main concern, a students easily gets food in hostel, but in apar...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 481, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...king life more difficult, Some students dont see if the living cost high or low they...
^^^^
Line 7, column 477, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... provide little credible support to the authors conclusion in several critical respects...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0843373494 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73588540522 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503614457831 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.4448075739 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.052631579 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8421052632 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281873743608 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836760273795 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110830295669 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148870322876 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0765321367397 0.0628817314937 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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