The argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on unwarranted assumption that Alpha construction company is better than Zeta, and other assumption is that Zeta costs more to build than alpha.Taken as a whole, these unstated assumptions render the argument highly suspect. If these unstated assumptions do not hold true than the argument totally falls apart.
Firstly, the author assumes that the building constructed by Zeta cost 30 percent more to build. The argument also mentions that the two new buildings are in different regions. It is possible that the one area is expensive than the other, due to which the cost of Zeta is also higher than Alpha. Also, the cost material and labor required to construct the buildings differ from area to area. The author doesn't provide any evidence or information such as the labor and material cost in two different regions.
Secondly, the author states that the two buildings had identical floor plans, building constructed by Zeta has expenses for maintenance last year were twice those of the building constructed by Alpha. The author only mentions the last year expenses, he or she have not mentioned about the past expenses of both the companies. This is again an assumption without any evidence. Furthermore, the author mentions that the energy consumption of the Zeta building has been higher than that of the Alpha building every year since its construction. It may be possible that there are more number of employees in Zeta building than in alpha building. Also, may be more meetings are held in Zeta building, due to which many people come there often.
Finally, the argument includes that Alpha has a stable workforce with little employee turnover. As more people come in Alpha for meetings, the main focus is how to attract the customer for their product, that is why turnover is not that great. Also, the material and labor is not available as much required. Careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author's conclusion in several respects, and raises several skeptical questions.
In conclusion, the author's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. Without convincing answers to these questions, the reader is left with the impression that the claims made by the author are more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence. To bolster it further, the author should provide a concrete evidence by way of reliable survey why Zeta costs more than alpha to build and why energy consumption is more of Zeta building.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 423 350
No. of Characters: 2092 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.535 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.946 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.539 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.676 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Taken
...hat Zeta costs more to build than alpha.Taken as a whole, these unstated assumptions ...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 304, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ons render the argument highly suspect. If these unstated assumptions do not hold ...
^^
Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...gs differ from area to area. The author doesnt provide any evidence or information suc...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 261, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...tions the last year expenses, he or she have not mentioned about the past expenses o...
^^^^
Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
... people come in Alpha for meetings, the main focus is how to attract the customer for thei...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 399, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...rovides little credible support for the authors conclusion in several respects, and rai...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...tical questions. In conclusion, the authors argument is unpersuasive as it stands. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 421.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10213776722 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64137929516 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465558194774 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2600189814 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.285714286 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0476190476 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278346555539 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885633161544 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112403715361 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148635558204 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105790974535 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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