It is good to engage the students in charity tasks. It incluates the moral values in students which helps in the overall development of students. The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. The proposal of making it mandatory is full of unwarranted assumptions which invalidate the argument made.
The argument has not considered the fact that the students who are in the final year who would be busy with their placement preparation would not be able to cope up or devote that much time. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. It might be the case some students want to opt for more elective courses and they can not devote that much time to charity. To make it mandatory, would put an extra burden on them. The decision has been taken without considering the situation of the students.
Some students who are in the first year or second year can be instructed to associate with any charity to give back to the community and gain real-world experience. It also depends on the nature of the study being pursued by the students. If a student belongs to the engineering stream, it would be futile for them as it would not give them any industry experience which would prepare them for the industry-oriented job. Indeed, if the students belong to any journalism course, charity exposure would help them to know the outer world better and will develop their personality. The argument consists of the unwarranted assumption of not considering the nature of the study students.
It also depends upon the student's wish to indulge in charity tasks. It might be the case that some students would not like to indulge in such activities. For them, to make it mandatory, would not be a good choice. The opportunity should be made available to them, who would happily like to involve in charity tasks without considering any apprehensions.
To conclude, the university assumes that it would be beneficial for all students without taking into consideration the stream they chose to build their careers. To put restriction to complete at least 8 hours that too unpaid hours for a total of 9 months is absurd as some students may be doing a part-time job to sustain their family after college hours. They would not be able to devote that much time to charity. The argument is subjected to fallacy therefore, I refute this argument.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2028 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.772 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.732 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.318 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.154 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... which invalidate the argument made. The argument has not considered the fact th...
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Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le to cope up or devote that much time. The proposed graduation requirement would b...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y therefore, I refute this argument. It is good to engage the students in cha...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... which invalidate the argument made. The argument has not considered the fact th...
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Line 11, column 192, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le to cope up or devote that much time. The proposed graduation requirement would b...
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Line 16, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y therefore, I refute this argument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 42.0 19.6327345309 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 40.0 12.9520958084 309% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 13.6137724551 206% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 70.0 28.8173652695 243% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 130.0 55.5748502994 234% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 34.0 16.3942115768 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4148.0 2260.96107784 183% => OK
No of words: 850.0 441.139720559 193% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.39951474433 4.56307096286 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79934347221 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.225882352941 0.468620217663 48% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1306.8 705.55239521 185% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 4.96107784431 363% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 18.0 8.76447105788 205% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 44.0 19.7664670659 223% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.727747151 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2727272727 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3181818182 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.20454545455 5.70786347227 21% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 10.0 5.15768463074 194% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.20758483034 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 6.88822355289 261% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186262312808 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068458120508 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11927481656 0.0701772020484 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132147595451 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910839819251 0.0628817314937 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.1 8.32208582834 73% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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