The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries has sent recommendation to the company's president that, "In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. The author has came to conclusion that, by installing software to detect employees Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits. However before this recommendation can be properly evaluated three question must be answered.
First of all author is assuming that to improve employees productivity, electronic monitoring of employees internet use must be implemented, but what if this get’s more worse? For implementing this thing, one should hire a person to monitor all employees. Even though electronic monitoring will be there, human might be needed to analyse the output. And to analyse the whole industries employee one person might be less to monitor. And this may lead to high costing as company would need to hire person as per requirement and give salary to them as well as putting electronic monitoring system which would be expensive. Even there might be chance that employees gets to know about monitoring person and they may bribe that person and there will be no outcome. As mostly person who is analysing is trusted by higher authority and so higher authority will not always check the system. So by considering this situation the assumption is getting weaken to improve employees' productivity, by implementing electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations.
Secondly, what if employees get to know about their monitoring, and about 90 percent of employees are not cunning? This may lead to great loss of workers as due to monitoring they may seem that, Climpson industry doesn’t have faith in their workers and so they are investigating them by monitoring. And so employees might leave the industries and go to industry where they are accepted as trustworthy employees. So this situation will not only lead to loss workers but also loss of money, as implementing of electronic monitoring might lead to high expenses. Therefore the assumption about improving employees productivity by monitoring their workstation is getting weaken.
Third case comes employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. But instead, if industry uses this as activities like playing games and allow employees to spend one-fourth of work time involving in this scenario. Employees might get more productive as work time decreases and other activity might involve them to produce work faster. This may also lead to getting increase sales with happy employees. So, here also assumption is getting weaker about employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed down with several unwanted assumptions. If author is able to analyse detail answer to above scenario’s through proper research and offer evidence, then it may work to implement electronic monitoring of employees Internet use from their workstations
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 19 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 585 350
No. of Characters: 3047 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.918 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.209 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.896 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 221 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 180 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 142 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 103 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.784 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.494 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 500, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
...opping or playing games. The author has came to conclusion that, by installing softw...
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Line 1, column 720, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...mpson, and improve our overall profits. However before this recommendation can be prope...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'worse' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: worse
... be implemented, but what if this get’s more worse? For implementing this thing, one shoul...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'industries'' or 'industry's'?
Suggestion: industries'; industry's
...se the output. And to analyse the whole industries employee one person might be less to mo...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 560, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...monitoring might lead to high expenses. Therefore the assumption about improving employee...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 29.0 12.9520958084 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 26.0 11.1786427146 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3118.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 584.0 441.139720559 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33904109589 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91590194646 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97938907192 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400684931507 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 953.1 705.55239521 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3839566625 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.916666667 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411393930369 0.218282227539 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136550229442 0.0743258471296 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156852833549 0.0701772020484 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254974399243 0.128457276422 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153367394756 0.0628817314937 244% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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