A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City
restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no
currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the
majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has
shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a
decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating.
Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should
be quite popular and profitable.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In a recent sales study it is shown that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during past five years, even though there is no speciality with seafood in restaurants. The opponents have come to this conclusion due to nationwide study that indicates that families at Bay City eat few home cooked meals than they use to eat a decade ago. However before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, some scenario must be answered.
First of all, is nationwide study is properly analyzed? As it only states that families eat less home cooked meals, but it does not have proper statement which tells that all family only eats only seafood. There might be scenario that families at Bay City might not eat much home cooked meals due to lack of time in their tight schedule. As today's world has vast technology and high competition it might be possible that cooking is not possible on everyday bases. But it does not tells us that all this families only eat seafood. There are many possible situation like eating fruits or a healthy meal provided by their office. So simplying assuming that all or most the family who don't prefer cooked meals eats seafood is not true.
Secondly, in Bay City though there is no seafood specialist the dishes of seafood consumption is increasing is stated here, but there may be condition in restaurants that except seafood only beverages are provided by most of the restaurants in Bay City. These brings to no other option of having variety in eating and due to hunger people stays on seafood only. If in Bay City, about 8 out of 10 restaurants are having only specific choice options in their menu with high weightage of seafood, than there would be obvious to bring people to eat seafood. And due to lack of time and hunger people would not consider whether food is salubrious or not. So instead of just providing more specialist seafood in restaurants it might be profitable to bring variety of options for food.
Thirdly case comes that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. But there might be scenario that increasing restaurant in Bay City with seafood dishes might get worsen to present restaurants. As amount of resources needed to build the seafood dishes might be challenging in Bay City due to lack of fishes or required things to cook seafood and this may bring to loss for present resturant as well as new restaurants. So proper analysis of requirements needs to take place before bringing new seafood dishes or new restaurant.
In conclusion , the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwanted assumption. If author is able to give answers to above scenario and offer more evidence (perhaps in the form of a systematic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposal recommendation to bring the new seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood with gaining popularity and profitable scenario.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 519 350
No. of Characters: 2482 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.773 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.782 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.619 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.863 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 356, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ity eat few home cooked meals than they use to eat a decade ago. However before thi...
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Line 1, column 381, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...eals than they use to eat a decade ago. However before this recommendation can be prope...
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Line 3, column 481, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'tell'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: tell
...ible on everyday bases. But it does not tells us that all this families only eat seaf...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 481, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'tell'
Suggestion: tell
...ible on everyday bases. But it does not tells us that all this families only eat seaf...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 499, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ases. But it does not tells us that all this families only eat seafood. There are ma...
^^^^
Line 3, column 555, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'situations'?
Suggestion: situations
...ly eat seafood. There are many possible situation like eating fruits or a healthy meal pr...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 682, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ssuming that all or most the family who dont prefer cooked meals eats seafood is not...
^^^^
Line 5, column 241, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... are provided by most of the restaurants in Bay City. These brings to no other op...
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Line 9, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...shes or new restaurant. In conclusion , the argument, as it stands now, is cons...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, as to, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2530.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 518.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88416988417 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66583261818 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445945945946 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 783.0 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.338849293 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.476190476 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336188434314 0.218282227539 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121174927135 0.0743258471296 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152326591532 0.0701772020484 217% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218538427671 0.128457276422 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125854319864 0.0628817314937 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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