GRE A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood Moreover the majority

The author argues that the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable since a recent sales study indicates the growth of the seafood consumption by around 30 percent during the past five years in the Bay City. He further states that the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families and a nationwide study reveals that such families are inclined towards eating outside food which is healthy, as the basis for his argument that the Captain Seafood restaurant will serve profitably to these people. However, the presumptions made by the author needs to be substantiated with additional evidence, to verify the persuasiveness of his argument.
First of all, the recent sales study which corroborates the increase in consumption of seafood dishes in restaurants is relatively new, accounting for only the past five years. No evidence regarding how this study holds relevance in the long term in presented anywhere. The increase in consumption of seafood dishes might be due to relatively higher availability of marine animals during the past five years. It might also be due to migration of people coming into Bay City who are more inclined towards having seafood dishes. However, if such migratory movement is unlikely to continue or maybe a movement of such people or animals out of the Bay City occurs in the upcoming years then a decline is more likely to occur in the amount of seafood consumption. Hence, further evidence needs to be presented which supports that the recent sales of seafood dishes in restaurants at Bay City is likely to continue in the following years and also that the larger part of its inhabitants are inclined to having seafood dishes at restaurants.
Secondly, the author predicts the profitability of the Captain Seafood restaurant based on a nationwide study which reveals that two-income families, which is predominant in Bay City, are inclined towards having outside food. At the same time, they want food that is healthy. However, no evidence has been presented to show how Captain Seafood serves healthy seafood dishes. Furthermore, whether the people involved in the study actually are inclined towards having seafood dishes in restaurants or do they consider seafood dishes healthy at all remains unanswered and hence further evidence is needed to corroborate this relationship between the nationwide study and the consumption of seafood dishes.
Even if all the above points are proven, that is if the recent sales study indeed confirms that such a trend is to follow in the recent years and that the nationwide study on two-income families correlates to those in Bay City and their inclination towards having seafood dishes at restaurants, the question remains how does Captain Seafood, which specializes in seafood dishes, stand out amidst competition. No evidence regarding how specializing in seafood dishes make it profitable has been presented here. The questions that may be asked pertaining to this is whether this is the only seafood restaurant at Bay City and hence the author concludes that Captain Seafood restaurant will inevitably be profitable. Unless evidence pertaining to how Captain Seafood restaurant stands out amidst competition, how specializing in seafood differentiates it from other restaurants in the Bay City, the argument that such a restaurant will be profitable just because the people at Bay City likes seafood is somewhat vague.
In conclusion, it is possible that the Captain Seafood restaurant will turn out to be profitable and popular in the Bay City owing to factors such as the predominant culture at Bay City is two-income families who like to have outside food, rather than home-cooked meals and that the residents at Bay City have a predilection for seafood dishes served at restaurants. However, as it stands now, the author’s argument stands unpersuasive due to lack of evidence on several factors such as how the recent sales study is dependable enough, how the nationwide study correlates to the inhabitants of Bay City and how specializing in seafood makes Captain Seafood restaurant inevitably profitable and popular amidst competition with other restaurants.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 55.5748502994 178% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3544.0 2260.96107784 157% => OK
No of words: 673.0 441.139720559 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26597325409 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.09335287823 4.56307096286 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87907903391 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.353640416048 0.468620217663 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1117.8 705.55239521 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 35.0 22.8473053892 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 105.51493573 57.8364921388 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 186.526315789 119.503703932 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4210526316 23.324526521 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419256915185 0.218282227539 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167504029138 0.0743258471296 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970689635471 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292977503371 0.128457276422 228% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538971691238 0.0628817314937 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.1 14.3799401198 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.49 48.3550499002 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 12.197005988 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 98.500998004 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.1389221557 144% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 673 350
No. of Characters: 3489 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.093 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.184 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.827 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 277 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 211 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 135 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 91 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.838 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.427 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.427 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.17 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5