According to the vice president of Human resources at Climpson Industries, he suggests the president to monitor the clerks' Internet use from their workstations in order to improve their employees' productivity. In specific, by intalling software to detect the clerks' behavior in the Internet while using their workstation, there will be punishiment if they are shopping or playing games.Hence as the author mentions ,the companies' overall profits will be improved.While the suggestion by these reasons and methods are problematic, let evaluate them carefully.
To begin with,let's make a general glare from the begnning to the end. The author want to improve their employees' prodctivity, while ay last, the author predicts that the overall profits will be improved by this implement. We can not find out what is the target of the author by monitoring their staff. Because there is no obvious devidence between the employee's productivity and the companies' overall profits. We can not make the conslusion that the profits will increase because the clerks' productivity is increasing. As there are other factors conherent with the profits, such as the competence of the prodcuts and the market.Even if all of the employees wokrs very hard, we either could not predict the profit must increase. Maybe the whole market is in the depression, people do not want these products any more.
What's more, let's talk about the monitoring employees. Given the author does not show us the present condition of the company, we can not at first to assert that the employees feel like surfing the Internet while working. Even they really does, I believe there are some reasons for them by doing so. Maybe they have too much leisure time without assignments or they are reluctant to do their job, so they are resisting by shoping or playing games. These situations are all possible, thus the author should make a wise observation to the clerks, in this way, he may find the real problems if they have.
Another reason is that if this implement takes into excecution, we can not predict the result by this measure. There is a high possibility that most of the employees are resisting the work in that this detecting software installation could bring about the arguments of privacy rights.Becasue the empolyee are probably not willing to be monitored by their boss.
In conclusion, I fully comprehend the vice president's effort to improve the employees' productivity, while he wrongly asserts that it would impove the overall productivity by this measure as there is no relevance as we discussed. The author should make deep observation to find the real situation of the company then to make a wise implements.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In specific, by intalling software to detect the clerks' behavior in the Internet while using their workstation, there will be punishiment if they are shopping or playing games.Hence as the author mentions ,the companies' overall profits will be improved.While the suggestion by these reasons and methods are problematic, let evaluate them carefully.
Error: punishiment Suggestion: punishment
Error: intalling Suggestion: installing
Sentence: To begin with,let's make a general glare from the begnning to the end.
Error: begnning Suggestion: beginning
Sentence: The author want to improve their employees' prodctivity, while ay last, the author predicts that the overall profits will be improved by this implement.
Error: ay Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: prodctivity Suggestion: productivity
Sentence: Because there is no obvious devidence between the employee's productivity and the companies' overall profits.
Error: devidence Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: We can not make the conslusion that the profits will increase because the clerks' productivity is increasing.
Error: conslusion Suggestion: conclusion
Sentence: As there are other factors conherent with the profits, such as the competence of the prodcuts and the market.Even if all of the employees wokrs very hard, we either could not predict the profit must increase.
Error: conherent Suggestion: coherent
Error: wokrs Suggestion: works
Error: prodcuts Suggestion: products
Sentence: Maybe they have too much leisure time without assignments or they are reluctant to do their job, so they are resisting by shoping or playing games.
Error: shoping Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Another reason is that if this implement takes into excecution, we can not predict the result by this measure.
Error: excecution Suggestion: execution
Sentence: There is a high possibility that most of the employees are resisting the work in that this detecting software installation could bring about the arguments of privacy rights.Becasue the empolyee are probably not willing to be monitored by their boss.
Error: empolyee Suggestion: employee
Sentence: In conclusion, I fully comprehend the vice president's effort to improve the employees' productivity, while he wrongly asserts that it would impove the overall productivity by this measure as there is no relevance as we discussed.
Error: impove Suggestion: improve
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 447 350
No. of Characters: 2201 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.924 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.646 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.379 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Internet) must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...resident to monitor the clerks Internet use from their workstations in order to imp...
^^^
Line 1, column 260, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'clerks'' or 'clerk's'?
Suggestion: clerks'; clerk's
...ic, by intalling software to detect the clerks behavior in the Internet while using th...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 387, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hence
...t if they are shopping or playing games.Hence as the author mentions ,the companies o...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 387, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...t if they are shopping or playing games.Hence as the author mentions ,the companies o...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 415, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...aying games.Hence as the author mentions ,the companies overall profits will be im...
^^
Line 1, column 464, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...panies overall profits will be improved.While the suggestion by these reasons and met...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , lets
...valuate them carefully. To begin with,lets make a general glare from the begnning ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...ere is no obvious devidence between the employees productivity and the companies overall ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 485, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'clerks'' or 'clerk's'?
Suggestion: clerks'; clerk's
...t the profits will increase because the clerks productivity is increasing. As there ar...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 629, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Even
...mpetence of the prodcuts and the market.Even if all of the employees wokrs very hard...
^^^^
Line 3, column 637, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... of the prodcuts and the market.Even if all of the employees wokrs very hard, we either co...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...do not want these products any more. Whats more, lets talk about the monitoring em...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 285, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Becasue
...g about the arguments of privacy rights.Becasue the empolyee are probably not willing t...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 77, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...e vice presidents effort to improve the employees productivity, while he wrongly asserts ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, really, so, then, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2257.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10633484163 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83046503585 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504524886878 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.1241242948 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.388888889 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5555555556 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05555555556 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200682485315 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065395341383 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748779903998 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120530179642 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546331759566 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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