People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supportin

People's behavior here we discuss with the author should be seprated as inborn and acquried behavior. As far as I concen, at this kind of arrangement, I agree with the author fundamentally. Through the whole life, it is an important creed for us to behave ourselves in modern society. As we born to be a little kid who cannot control himself, so we need to be cultivated by outerior emlements. Even the animal learn to survive through others like their parents. As human, we get more behavior from ouside.

It is true that an infant can get breed by its mother without taught how to sip milk from mommy, because that is an inborn behavior, which we had been evovled for thausands of years as mammals. By the time we began to recognize the world, as little kids one year or so, we are learnning from outside like the guide of parents or big sisters or brothers.On the contrary , We also dicovered that the are some stories about lilttle kids, who abused young in the wildderness area , breeded by wild animals like wovles, can scrawl like their breeding "mother" , run so fast like the wolf "friends".

The story also tell us one can learn outside even from animals, as the symbol of city Rome, two kidds breeded under their wolf mother. Here we talk about the acquried behavior. With out the guidence of human-being, the two kids as a emblem of Fighting and Surviving inspit, the phenomenon can be our topic of we are human's behavior aren't determined by ourselves. We are sol infulenced by outside, so it is essential for us to recognize the behabior outside carefully, or ones will bite like animals maybe.

As we discuss the importance of outside behaivor that can influence us, we should know the importance of culvitated by proper behavior.Knife, the invetion of human, can be used to cut apples, while also can hurt people. As we are concerning as a whole, people should be taught with good behavior in case they are learing from the bad one.

In conclusion, not only determined outside, our behavior should be better with good influence.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'bore'?
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... big sisters or brothers.On the contrary , We also dicovered that the are some sto...
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Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
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...n the contrary , We also dicovered that the are some stories about lilttle kids, who ab...
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...who abused young in the wildderness area , breeded by wild animals like wovles, ca...
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...l like their breeding 'mother' , run so fast like the wolf 'friends...
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Line 5, column 178, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: Without
...re we talk about the acquried behavior. With out the guidence of human-being, the two ki...
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...uidence of human-being, the two kids as a emblem of Fighting and Surviving inspit...
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... be our topic of we are humans behavior arent determined by ourselves. We are sol inf...
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Suggestion: Knife
...rtance of culvitated by proper behavior.Knife, the invetion of human, can be used to ...
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Line 7, column 227, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ples, while also can hurt people. As we are concerning as a whole, people should be taught wit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, while, in conclusion, kind of, it is true, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78272980501 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79785164194 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545961002786 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.7138112724 60.3974514979 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.466666667 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9333333333 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10510542242 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447864100325 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293682488825 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0697781523269 0.150359130593 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0139829815518 0.0667264976115 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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