vitamin A deficiency
For the government of Tagus to combat vitamin A deficiency in its population the use of a new genetically engineered millet seed that is rich in vitamin A is a viable option. For the desired results, however, there are many questions that need to be answered before the government of Tagus readily adopts the solution that the international development organization has put forth. To determine the further viability of this route a detailed study on the crop yield, ease of farming, effects on the economy, and alternative methods should be explored.
The switch to a higher vitamin A millet breed is a good idea but unless there is a study done on the crop yield and the ease of farming it is done there could potentially be big problems if Tagus were to fully endorse the switch from regular millet. Often with genetically engineered crops, the overall crop yield is lower and if that holds true for this millet breed there could be countrywide shortages of the staple grain of the population. Additionally, if the millet seed is harder for farmers to grow or requires any sort of additional infrastructure the benefits could be potentially outweighed by the hardships with which the farmers experience.
In addition to a comprehensive study on the crop yields and farming practices of taking on the new crop, the government of Tagus would be wise to make a plan to ensure the complete turn over to the new millet breed to prevent a situation in which the new seed is competing against the regular, cheaper to produce grain. Based on basic economics the regular seed would be cheaper than the new seed because the input costs are lower as well as the opportunity costs. Even with government subsidies for the farmers to help pay for the more expensive source seed the government would also need to ensure that new input costs to producing the seed are not reflected in the market price of it. This may require additional market subsidies and organizational costs to make the millet a financially viable alternative to the population that is readily adopted.
The promotion of the new millet by the government will also have unforeseen costs and a PR campaign would need to be undertaken to promote the new grain. The cost of such a PR campaign should be made aware to the government and whether they will need to fund the program themselves or if the international development organization will also contribute. This information would be beneficial in figuring the overall costs of adopting the new seed.
Finally, the government of Tagus should conduct a comprehensive study of any alternatives to reducing vitamin A deficiency in its population. Although the new millet breed is certainly promising there may be other ways to increase the vitamin A intake that could be potentially cheaper and all-encompassing. Without this information, the government is simply making a decision with a lack of pertinent information.
Before 'doing everything it can to promote this new type of millet', the responsible decision to exercise increased information gathering would undoubtedly benefit the population and the government. By increasing the information that the government is working through these series of studies will allow it to make a more educated and impactful decision before rushing into a campaign that could have potentially disastrous effects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 432, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... seed because the input costs are lower as well as the opportunity costs. Even wit...
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Line 9, column 173, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...pulation. Although the new millet breed is certainly promising there may be other ways to increase the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, well, in addition, sort of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2813.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 556.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05935251799 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97734130202 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419064748201 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 898.2 705.55239521 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.4829769301 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.277777778 119.503703932 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8888888889 23.324526521 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0981047981303 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445428844266 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10149337899 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0737565227161 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0919329111576 0.0628817314937 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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