This passage claims that opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café, because the cafe would be as welcomed by customers as book, also the children's book will become less popular and a café will can replace children’s section. This reasoning has several flaws, and, therefore, is not convincing. The logic of the argument is compromised because the author draws a questionable analogy, relies on unsupported cause-effect relationship and fails to mention some important aspects.
First of all, when the author concludes that opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers on the basis that Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base, the author assumes that the cafe would be as welcomed by customers as books. However, people who go to the store because of wide selection of books in all subjects, may not like bookstore with food at the same place. But the author ignores to consider this scenrio and his conclusion is not convincing. Having the answer to the question why the opening of the café will attract more visitors to the bookshop will strengthen the author's argument.
Second, the author assumes that children's book section will probably become less popular and less selling because of significant decline in the percentage of population under age ten, according to recent national census. However it is unsupported cause-effect statement. Maybe parents who have one or two kids will may not spend more quality time with their kids and, probably, will b more books for this purpose. Therefore, Monarch should monitor the sales of children’s books for confirm its decision regarding the opening the cafe
Third, making a statement about the advantages of opening a cafe, the author presupposes that a café is the best way to improve competitiveness. however the author fails to mention some important aspects that should have been addressed in the passage. There are many ways to attract more customers and improve shops position on the market. The Directors of Monarch Books should research market and consider other ways of increasing sales.
Finally, the argument is replete with several ambiguous parts. The questions, whic answers illustrates the argument, are not addressed by the author. Hence, the conclusion which is based on such an inconclusive argument cannot be tenable.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. for this statement:
Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten.
we may argue like:
a. it is a national census, the result may not apply to this city.
b. 'a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten' is not equal to 'a significant decline in the book sales'
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 2020 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.063 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.594 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.242 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.554 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 489, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... draws a questionable analogy, relies on unsupported cause-effect relationship an...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ils to mention some important aspects. First of all, when the author concludes ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 343, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... as books. However, people who go to the store because of wide selection of book...
^^
Line 2, column 379, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the store because of wide selection of books in all subjects, may not like book...
^^
Line 2, column 667, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ors to the bookshop will strengthen the authors argument. Second, the author as...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ill strengthen the authors argument. Second, the author assumes that children...
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Line 4, column 99, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun selling is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...n will probably become less popular and less selling because of significant decline ...
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Line 4, column 163, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...significant decline in the percentage of population under age ten, according to r...
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Line 4, column 228, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...n, according to recent national census. However it is unsupported cause-effect statemen...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ecision regarding the opening the cafe Third, making a statement about the adva...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...he best way to improve competitiveness. however the author fails to mention some import...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: however,
...he best way to improve competitiveness. however the author fails to mention some import...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sider other ways of increasing sales. Finally, the argument is replete with se...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, third, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22807017544 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71972208332 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513784461153 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.7463138801 57.8364921388 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.705882353 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4705882353 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376751598461 0.218282227539 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946751095286 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113714114958 0.0701772020484 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194547571028 0.128457276422 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131930690389 0.0628817314937 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.