Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the argument claims that Palean woven bags are not unique to Palea as it was once believed since they are also found at Lithos where there is no possible communcation due to the river in between them. The claim by itself is highly unpersuasive and the presented evidence on lack of boat ruins is not adequate the derive such a huge conclusion. To understand the real origins of the Palean woven bags further examination of evidence is compulsory.
First of all, the author of the claim overlooks the fact that historical truths are highly susceptible to change under the light of new findings and discoveries. In the case of Palea, currently not having any trace of boats does not absolutely mean that Paleans never had boats. There is still the possibility of finding additional evidence. Also, we don’t know how eagerly the historical site, especially river area was searched. Maybe there is still an on going work on the site. Along with the extend of the workings we need evidence on the methodology used and the adequacy of the devices. For example, if Palean people were using wood as material for their boats, this boats might as well be rotten and that might be the reason they remain undiscovered. If archeologist were to find boats ruins, the statement claiming Palean bags are unique to Palea remains probable.
Even with the existing knowledge on Palean boats, the authors direct conclusion is not sound due to lack of evidence on Lithos boats. Lithos people might be travelling along the river to engage in trading activities with Palean people where they first got introduced to the distinctive woven bag pattern of Palea. The transportation of the palean bags to the neighboring communities might be a consequence of a trade or Lithos people might be inspired by the patern and later applied them to their own design.
Finally the author never mentioned when did the river ,the assumed geographical impediment between Lithos and Palea, had arised. Maybe the river occured years later the Palean people left the area following a natural event such as an earthquake. Without decent geographical evidence on formation of the area, the claim is invalid.
In conclusion, the authors argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To make the argument valid careful scrutiny of broader evidence regarding both geography and archeology is necessary.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 1933 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.881 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.636 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.842 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.061 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 324, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e on lack of boat ruins is not adequate the derive such a huge conclusion. To understand t...
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Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'had' and 'boats'.
Suggestion: had never boats
...s does not absolutely mean that Paleans never had boats. There is still the possibility of find...
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Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: ON_GOING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
...a was searched. Maybe there is still an on going work on the site. Along with the extend...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 499, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...n on going work on the site. Along with the extend of the workings we need evidence on the...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...r applied them to their own design. Finally the author never mentioned when did the...
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Line 7, column 54, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...uthor never mentioned when did the river ,the assumed geographical impediment betw...
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Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...laim is invalid. In conclusion, the authors argument is unpersuasive as it stands. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, look, may, regarding, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03291139241 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70252423442 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516455696203 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4333953749 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.631578947 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0966496284554 0.218282227539 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0288153594932 0.0743258471296 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365067743862 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0497984595274 0.128457276422 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316961184219 0.0628817314937 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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