Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument presents a case for concluding the origin of Palean baskets, and analyses its indigenous nature. This account is largely based on archaeological surveys, discoveries and geographical evidence. However, to make an accurate deduction, we require additional and more germane evidence that spans historical and cultural areas too.
To determine that the style is “Palean”, archeological surveys must be conducted globally after analysing the settlements of the Palean people outside of Palea too. Sufficient historical accounts must be available to determine these movement patterns, along with information about their cultural and religious tendencies which would help narrow down possible presence of these communities. By looking into drawings and inscriptions, such data can retrieved too.
When sufficient facts and information about the distribution of the Palean people has been obtained, archaeologists can then perform a thorough searching of these areas and make a comprehensive comparison of the baskets found and their distinctive styles. If the styles match in all these areas then the presented arguement that Palean baskets are not unique may not hold.
Sociological and cultural factors largely influence a region’s art and craft. By understanding the major influences on the Palean people, the basket weaving style of these influences can be analysed and compared to see the possible similarities. If significant, this evidence would further strengthen the argument.
An accurate understanding of the geography of Palea would play a major role in supporting or weakening the argument. The Brim River may have been a recent formation due to causes such as landslides or earthquakes which may have altered the course of another water body. If such is the case, then the region across the Brim River may have also been Palea itself, majorly weakening the argument presented. Information about the layout of the region over many decades and centuries would provide the basis for drawing such conclusions.
Additional evidence and supporting information about a myriad of factors affecting the Palean people is required to draw stable conclusions as presented.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 331 350
No. of Characters: 1816 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.265 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.486 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.96 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.688 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.489 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 257, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ets found and their distinctive styles. If the styles match in all these areas the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, then, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 331.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71299093656 5.12650576532 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13242209208 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549848942598 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9449697167 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.1875 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6875 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12769275993 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388360427231 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429616076803 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0594818933296 0.128457276422 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392854390586 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 48.3550499002 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 12.197005988 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.84 12.5979740519 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.32208582834 117% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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