People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Behavior plays vital role in every man.Behavior of each person will tell where a person stands. All these behaviors cannot come all alone in a sigle day.It comes only through the practice. People can be told by the external forces to follow the behaviors but it is in their hand to follow those behavior.So I belive that the behavior relies only on their personnel making.

As we can take a student as an example, a student is made to follow the moral values by external forces like teachers,parents and etc but it is in his hands to follow.If he thinks he wants to shape him up as a man who follows great values in his life he will strat practicing those behaviors from childhood.If he feels to not to follow those moral values he cannot be changed so he willnot follow althose values he will be in his own way of practising behaviors which will affect atleast a single student in that class or in his surroundings and this behavior of him will be continued in his future also.So it is noted that behavior of a person stands oniy because of his own making.

We can take a person who is in a country where the rules are followed strictly.He follows all the rules as their will be a heavy punishment for him if he doesnot follow those rules.But if he goes to a country where there is no such strict goverment to make the people follow the rules.The person who is shifted this country from the strict county as an example, now it is in his hand to follow those rules which he followed in his country from where he migrated.If he had realy belived in true values he would follow those rules.If he just followed that because of the government then nobody is there in that country to correct him so he will not follow.

We can take M.K.Gandhi.He is called as mahatma,all the people who lived in that period are not called as mahatma because only one thing made the difference.He framed his rules and he lived with those rules which didnot affect other people and didnot affect him also there where nobody to tell him follow he belived in him self and he followed it.His father want him to be a vegetarian so he told gandhi not to eat chicken though he ate once he realised it and he stoped eating.There was nobody to tell him this but he followed his inner thoughts.

All in total it can be said that behavior of a man lies only on his individual making and it cannot be forced by external forces.

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Sentence: As we can take a student as an example, a student is made to follow the moral values by external forces like teachers,parents and etc but it is in his hands to follow.If he thinks he wants to shape him up as a man who follows great values in his life he will strat practicing those behaviors from childhood.If he feels to not to follow those moral values he cannot be changed so he willnot follow althose values he will be in his own way of practising behaviors which will affect atleast a single
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Sentence: We can take a person who is in a country where the rules are followed strictly.He follows all the rules as their will be a heavy punishment for him if he doesnot follow those rules.But if he goes to a country where there is no such strict goverment to make the people follow the rules.The person who is shifted this country from the strict county as an example, now it is in his hand to follow those rules which he followed in his country from where he migrated.If he had realy belived in true
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Sentence: We can take M.K.Gandhi.He is called as mahatma,all the people who lived in that period are not called as mahatma because only one thing made the difference.He framed his rules and he lived with those rules which didnot affect other people and didnot affect him also there where nobody to tell him follow he belived in him self and he followed it.His father want him to be a vegetarian so he told gandhi not to eat chicken though he ate once he realised it and he stoped eating.There was nobody to
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace want with verb, past tense

Sentence: All these behaviors cannot come all alone in a sigle day.It comes only through the practice.
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Sentence: People can be told by the external forces to follow the behaviors but it is in their hand to follow those behavior.So I belive that the behavior relies only on their personnel making.
Error: belive Suggestion: believe

Sentence: As we can take a student as an example, a student is made to follow the moral values by external forces like teachers,parents and etc but it is in his hands to follow.If he thinks he wants to shape him up as a man who follows great values in his life he will strat practicing those behaviors from childhood.If he feels to not to follow those moral values he cannot be changed so he willnot follow althose values he will be in his own way of practising behaviors which will affect atleast a single
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Error: practising Suggestion: practicing
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Sentence: student in that class or in his surroundings and this behavior of him will be continued in his future also.So it is noted that behavior of a person stands oniy because of his own making.
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Sentence: We can take a person who is in a country where the rules are followed strictly.He follows all the rules as their will be a heavy punishment for him if he doesnot follow those rules.But if he goes to a country where there is no such strict goverment to make the people follow the rules.The person who is shifted this country from the strict county as an example, now it is in his hand to follow those rules which he followed in his country from where he migrated.If he had realy belived in true
Error: realy Suggestion: really
Error: goverment Suggestion: government
Error: belived Suggestion: believed
Error: doesnot Suggestion: does not

Sentence: We can take M.K.Gandhi.He is called as mahatma,all the people who lived in that period are not called as mahatma because only one thing made the difference.He framed his rules and he lived with those rules which didnot affect other people and didnot affect him also there where nobody to tell him follow he belived in him self and he followed it.His father want him to be a vegetarian so he told gandhi not to eat chicken though he ate once he realised it and he stoped eating.There was nobody to
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Error: belived Suggestion: believed
Error: didnot Suggestion: did not
Error: stoped Suggestion: No alternate word

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