10) Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
With the deterioration of the environment, wild animals and plants' habitats have been severely damaged, which leaves a serious environmental problem for human beings. The economic gain and wilderness preservation, which one is more improtant for us? The statement claims that nations should take up the responsibilities to put forth laws to preserve remaining wilderness regions, and scrifice economy if there is any conflicts. In my point of view, I mostly agree with this statement, but there might be opportunities to obtain both at the same time.
Certainly, someone might counter the statement by claiming that economy is the pre-requiste for preservation of wilderness areas because the habitats could not be well preserved without sufficient funding. Protecting an wilderness area to remain natural could be a costy project, because it involves the facilities to be constructed, the manpower to be put in, and invaluable time spent. After the initial measures have been done, it still requires a very long period of sustaining. In this kind of public projects, the fund can only come from the nation itself. However, if a nation is suffering povety issues, or other severe issues that need funds to settle, the nation might not spend the funds in the enviornment protection. For example, in Africa, food and water scarcity are widespread. The governments in those nations do not have enough money to get their citizens out of the troublesome situation. In addition, they tend to kill precious animals for trades in order to get money for the improvement on national poverty.
A nation's responsibilities are not only developing the country for more wealth but protecting the habiats any lives stay, including human beings, animals and plants. Although becoming more wealthy is a rational pursuit for most of nations and their citizens, the damaged wilderness habitats usually can not be restored anymore. If nations develop economy in the price of the habitats, they will lose them forever, even when the nations are rich enough and regrete. Thus, in the first place, nations should not destory those places for economic gain.
Indeed, there might be possible ways to achieve both preservation of wilderness environment and economic growth concurrently. For example, a nation could turn the habitats into sites to attract tourists. In this case, the habitats can be protected well enough, and the transformations are able to bring revenues for the sites to continuously sustain.
In conclusion, preservation of natural wilderness habitats should not be scarified in order to gain economic benefits. However, the governments or institutions should consider ways that can make the habitats profitable while keeping their naturality reminded.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 405, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are any conflicts'?
Suggestion: there are any conflicts
...erness regions, and scrifice economy if there is any conflicts. In my point of view, I mostly agree wi...
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Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... without sufficient funding. Protecting an wilderness area to remain natural could...
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Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the nations') or simply say ''most nations''.
Suggestion: most of the nations; most nations
... more wealthy is a rational pursuit for most of nations and their citizens, the damaged wildern...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2325.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 433.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36951501155 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95310180785 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54272517321 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9255350498 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.714285714 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.619047619 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340660884611 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997216975044 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570970269396 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192137334615 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317762777889 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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