143. No field of study can advance significantly unless it incorporates knowledge and experience from outside that field.
It is debatable whether it is necessary to include knowledge and experience from outside fields to make a tremendous improvement in a specific field. I disagree with the statement because some fields of study can improve substantially without incorporating knowledge and experience from other fields of study. In the following essay, I will provide valid examples to strengthen my argument.
Admittedly, a range of fields would be advanced significantly with the help of external fields of study. In particualr, technology and politics need expertise of other studies to achieve a remarkable improvement. In the field of technology, Steve Jobs would be a compelling example. Steve Jobs was a founder of Apple corporation, at which he created various innovative products, such as iphone, ipod, and macbook. As Apple products have been well-known and popular with his innovative features as well as aesthetic components. To invent such apparatuses, he integrated disparate fields of studies, including math, material science, physics, and aesthetic deisign. In addition, in a political field, diplomats and politicians should not solely rely on their own political experiences. To accomplish further development, they should employ experts from different areas. For example, they should hire economic professionals as the economy plays a significant role in a nation’s well-being. Franklin D. Roosevelt had competent economic expertise. Thus, when the United States was mired in poverty and destitution due to the Great Depression, he implemented the New Dear project, which successfully stabilized the financial status of the states. Following the examples mentioned above, it is credible to state that there are several fields of study which had developed with the aid of expertise from other studies.
However, some areas of academic fields can succeed without applying knowledge from outside those fields. In general, mathematics and arts do not require additional learning from outside fields. To illustrate, math only bases on numbers and facts and solely focuses on establishing new theories and solving problems. For example, when Pythagoras discovered a groundbreaking math theory called the Pythagorean theorem, which did not utilize specific knowledge from any other fields but only mathematics concepts and theories, he was stuck in his room and spent decades of nights studying previous mathematical notions and ideas. Moreover, ingenuity and creativity are core components of art. Thus, artists usually spend most of their time thinking about innovative and creative ideas to reflect on their drawings other than studying other fields of study. Hence, it is not persuasive to contest that all fields of study need the help of other fields to bring out successful outcomes.
In brief, the author’s argument that no field of study can develop significantly unless it corporates the knowledge and experience from outside that field. Even though many fields can make more outstanding developments by combining various fields, some fields still can make substantial progress by solely relying on their fields’ expertise and knowledge.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, thus, well, as to, for example, in addition, in brief, in general, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2682.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 477.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62264150943 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00213010768 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56394129979 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 820.8 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.2470600116 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.75 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4684198341 0.243740707755 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121811316687 0.0831039109588 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150528351747 0.0758088955206 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.332408307645 0.150359130593 221% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123202855609 0.0667264976115 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.38706741573 119% => OK
difficult_words: 162.0 100.480337079 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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