9. Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
‘Good people do not need laws to tell them to act responsibly ,while bad people will find a way around the laws’, Plato…The prompt recommends that we do not depend on the legal system to solve the problems of modern society as these laws cannot change what is in people’s hearts and minds. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the statement, as in societies and nations we care about the conduct and performance of individuals and groups rather than hearts, minds and emotions.
As a matter of fact, beginning with the Greeks the formal legal system was created and implemented in order to control the performance of societies. Communities need a set of laws by which to abide in order to perform in their society…and have done so for the last few centuries. Men cannot roam the streets with no rules and regulations to dictate their performance in society, as an individual, as a group and as a contributing member of a community. The laws that were created by the Greeks were further enhanced by the Romans , and as such they created the basis for their greatest political endeavor. They were pioneers in creating a democratic state that set the stage for later political applications. Within this complex system, they were able to control a vast empire and as such have a specific code of conduct for their empire. It is true that in our modern soceity we have reservations against the Roman empire, but we have to admire their innovation in creating the laws and the legal system and in applying it and finally in seeing such a system through.
Furthermore, in our modern societies, when we educate our children, we make it a point not to indulge these children and to provide a strict guideline of rules and regulations. It is imperative that children know their limits and grow in an environment where they know their rights as well as their responsibilities. Living in complete chaos is not a healthy environment for our younger generation and this has been proven by most psychologist. What applies to our generation, applies to adults in different contexts. People need to know what is right and what is wrong, and they need to know that when we act irresponsibly we are to be punished and that punishment will depend on the level of the act. This is why we need the laws and we need the nations to implement them in a just manner. For instance, people have the tendency to litter or to drive fast,in the latter it is the thrill and the excitement, while the former, it the human nature of negligence. Nations work on educating societies; however, without fines these education tracks will Not be effective. Human beings need to know that for every action there is a reaction, and if I throw a napkin from my car window, I might get a fine for 1000$, then the probability of throwing the napkin will be 0. Depending solely on the heart ,mind and the human responsibility of the individual might work in some cases but not in criminal acts, speed limits and other serious matters. Indeed many problems in our societies will not be solved by laws; however, these laws were implemented to save us from numerous others.
Moreover, the factor that laws cannot change what is in people’s hearts and minds might be true. Yet the government is not interested in changing the inner nature of an individual rather it is interested in changing the performance and hopefully in the future that individual might change his perception of that issue.
Finally, I truly believe that nations and societies need the laws and regulations by which to operate or else we will be living in a forest. From the dawn of time, men have tried to create laws by which to abide to and regulate their performance and they have developed these laws through time. It is not now that we come and question such a concept because we think that it does not solve all of our problems . Indeed, laws might not solve all our problems but they do save us from many others!
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: ,
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Suggestion: The
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Message: Consider replacing "in a just manner" with adverb for "just"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...d we need the nations to implement them in a just manner. For instance, people have the tendency...
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Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$1000'.
Suggestion: $1000
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Suggestion: Indeed,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, while, for instance, as a matter of fact, as well as, in my opinion, in some cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 39.0 14.8657303371 262% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 33.0505617978 239% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 92.0 58.6224719101 157% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3272.0 2235.4752809 146% => OK
No of words: 697.0 442.535393258 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6944045911 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.13816675137 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68837066361 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431850789096 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1005.3 704.065955056 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7072048401 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.846153846 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8076923077 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 5.21951772744 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247715140899 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734394269299 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077705231119 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172442158141 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706052597262 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.8420337079 127% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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