11. Claim: Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.
Reason: It is inappropriate — and, perhaps, even cruel — to use public resources to fund the arts when people's basic needs are not being met.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Art is considered as the fuel of the creative mind; the food with which societies flourish and propagate…yet the basic demands of the population has to be the primary concern of nations. The prompt actually advocates for a stronger point whereby they consider that governments should completely suspend funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed. In fact, I agree with the above statement; however, this is conditional based on the context of each and every nation…This will be proved using the following three reasons.
To begin with, if we discuss highly impoverished states the prompt would be completely justified to consider that it is cruel to use public resources to fund the arts when people’s needs are not met. I believe that in these states the art is even extinct, because people need stability and a certain state of mind in order to produce and apprehend art and music. The problem is more complex than the funding; the intricate issue will lie in the state of the nation which is not stable economically, socially mentally and psychologically. When people’s needs are not met, when they have to strive to survive , they are not in a state of mind to apprehend art, advocate for art or produce art. The governments of these nations are usually stringent as well, will not be advocates of education. For instance, if we shed light on Africa, the notion of survival, the notion of hydration surpasses any other. Yemen is another example of a country who is battling hunger, war and survival and neither its government nor its people are in the mood of art.
Moreover, if we discuss nations that are considered developing countries, yet still have an outlook for art and this is probably what the prompt is attacking. These nations strive for art as an indication of development, of advancement, education and a way of communicating with the world. It is a language that the people of these nations with which they wish to express themselves in countries that are underdeveloped. For instance, in Lebanon, prior to its current economic crisis, it had an art sector even though it is considered a poor nation. The government did not invest huge amount of funds in the arts, yet it maintained a balance to sustain the image of this small country as a cultured cosmopolitan lighthouse in the center of the Middle East. In fact, it was a consensus effort between the government and the private sector to sustain that balance. I believe that it is the will of the people who believe that art is crucial for their survival, their education and their spirit and that food is not merely enough.
Furthermore, in developed countries such as the United States, funds for the arts are a substantial and in each and every sector across the country. It is the will of the nation to develop that sector, socially mentally and across the whole nation. Yet still the USA suffers from the worst health care system around the world and has a high number of homeless people all across the country. I think that they are trying to resolve their problems, but by eliminating funds for a crucial sector such as arts this will resolve the problem.
Finally as I said in the introduction that I agree with the prompt that funds should not be wasted when people are hungry and Africa is the best example for that. However, I think that it is contextual and conditional…and to prove my point currently Lebanon has moved into its worst economic crisis or ‘demise’ and the arts is definitely not on its agenda now !
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, well, as to, for instance, i think, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.3162921348 230% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2957.0 2235.4752809 132% => OK
No of words: 614.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81596091205 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.977853291 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76478482798 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441368078176 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 916.2 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8445959912 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 128.565217391 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6956521739 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26086956522 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377329226631 0.243740707755 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106795284954 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879119911679 0.0758088955206 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211696625403 0.150359130593 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565746741208 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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