It has been a long-term debate in the humanity area whether humanbeings’ behavior is decided by their personal willingness or outside forces. Some may agree that people’s behavior is always controlled only by forces, but I think people can make their own choices.
It is reasonable to say that some movements of people are determined by forces according to the history. During the history, humanbeings would like to take same actions following others because they could only receive the information from single source, like government or church. As a result, outside force would deeply influence people’s thoughts and then use them to fulfill its purpose. For example, Nazi Germany used its media, education, and industry system together to unite their people and force them to invade other countries, which lead to the Second World War. At that time, only a few people took their own actions against such behaviors, which shows that people’s behavior is mostly controlled by outside forces.
However, as the time flies, the development of the media and Internet brings people more options of the information, which helps people to make their own decisions. During the long period of history, people were accessible to single source from local system. But the Internet makes it possible for people to read and learn others work around the world. Even if such information is influenced by other forces, the multiple choices of information will help people to learn and analyze these thoughts, and finally develop their own thinking. With the help of these methods, people are able to make their own decisions without the influence of outside forces.
The key issue here is how we define ‘determined’. From my point of view, the behavior determined by forces means that people follow the rules and guidance of outside organizations without thinking, or they make some decisions following single source. The independent choices making is based on independent thinking, and the only way for humanbeings to form independent thinking is to get more information and then take self-thinking.
In conclusion, although people’s movements used to be forced by outside power, I believe with the development of information technology, everyone can make their choices by their own thoughts nowadays.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'agrees'.
Suggestion: agrees
...willingness or outside forces. Some may agree that people’s behavior is always contro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, second, so, then, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32240437158 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79669867618 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516393442623 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.184198499 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.75 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24482101674 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925046360407 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519101425606 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149010808752 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279494419215 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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