"According to the recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by the movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the content of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the people through advertising."
As the saying goes, united we stand, divided we fall"; one man cannot singlehandedly achieve anything as a leader by working in silo. When a school grading system is based on overall aggregate i.e. assigning position based on a student's total score, students tend to horde knowledge and information from their peers in a bid to get a higher score and win prizes. Annoying habits like this causes separation, bitterness and hatred among students, this act, when practiced for a long time becomes part of the students and over the years, the student relies only on his own knowledge, wisdom and understanding for decision making.
Relating this to becoming a good leader, a child that has been trained to win by competing all his life is sure to have a social disconnection as the constant habit of always wanting to compete with others will repel people. A good leader is one who listens to his followers. From the popular saying, “no man is an island of Knowledge", there will always be need for a leader be it in government, industry or other fields to consult with his cabinet members or executive members. Some followers have more knowledge and experience in some areas and their advices could come in handy and help the leader make quality decisions.
Furthermore, there should be an awakening in the educational section and emphasis should be laid on equal grading system. A grading scale that allows students work as a team should be designed and introduced into the educational system. Also, students who partake in group study should be encouraged by schools. Practical and group works should be added to school curriculums to encourage group study and a team bonding session should be organized per time for each team.
In conclusion, our society would produce more effective leader if we realign the educational sector to allow cooperation and team work amongst people. This way, we would be able to achieve an all-round success in all ramifications.
- Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another. 83
- "According to the recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by the movie reviewers about specific Super Scr 16
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 232, Rule ID: A_PLURAL
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...regate i.e. assigning position based on a students total score, students tend to horde kno...
Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
...has been trained to win by competing all his life is sure to have a social discon...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 330.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09696969697 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7911393976 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584848484848 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0797372731 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.384615385 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07692307692 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0239655828515 0.243740707755 10% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00862655307972 0.0831039109588 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0137920160624 0.0758088955206 18% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0163924156728 0.150359130593 11% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.010222505491 0.0667264976115 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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