"All archeological treasures should remain in the country in which they were originally discovered. These works should not be exported, even if museums in other parts of the world are better able to preserve and display them."
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.
The statement stating all archeological treasures should remain in the country in which they were originally discovered and should not be exported, even if museums in other parts of the world are better able to preserve and display them is plausible to a certain extent. Archeological treasures are part of the countries history and an evidence of its origin to a certain context. These treasures or artifacts resemble countries diversity and are very important in determining the different historical findings, wars and other social events that took place back in time. Preserving such treasures is of atmost importance as they symbolize the ancestral origins.
It should be the duty of any country to preserve the archeological treasures and findings that symbolize their significance and are a part of the history. These treasures not only signify the countries history but also help in deriving other findings through archeological examinations. Such examinations could be helpful in redefining many hypothesis and theories which lack evidence. For example few years back in India, a team archeologists had discovered currency from the Ashoka rulers dynasty. upon examination and preservation of the coins it was revealed that the actual date of Ashoka's rule might have been hundreds of years before than what was earlier mentioned.
Although it is true that these archeological treasures should not be exported, but sometimes they fall short in acquiring importance and also get perished in time due to lack of care. Many countries have given their utmost important artifacts to some of the world class museums, like the Louvre museum in France. The louvre musuem is one of the most famous and high visiting museums in the world. It is place to one of the rarest and elite artifacts from all over the world. This has helped many countries to gain global significance through their display of such archeological treasure at a global scale.
In conclusion, archeological treasures should be preserved rather than exporting it to a world class museum. Though exporting it to other museums gains global significance but at the same time it affects the countries diversity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: ORIGINALLY_DISCOVERED[1]
Message: Use simply 'discovered'.
Suggestion: discovered
...emain in the country in which they were originally discovered and should not be exported, even if mus...
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Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...Archeological treasures are part of the countries history and an evidence of its origin t...
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Line 3, column 193, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...y. These treasures not only signify the countries history but also help in deriving other...
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Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hypothesis seems to be countable; consider using: 'many hypotheses', 'many hypothesises'.
Suggestion: many hypotheses; many hypothesises
...inations could be helpful in redefining many hypothesis and theories which lack evidence. For e...
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Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'archeologist'?
Suggestion: archeologist
...example few years back in India, a team archeologists had discovered currency from the Ashoka...
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Line 3, column 501, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Upon
...urrency from the Ashoka rulers dynasty. upon examination and preservation of the coi...
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Line 5, column 247, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ven their utmost important artifacts to some of the world class museums, like the Louvre mu...
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Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...nce but at the same time it affects the countries diversity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 348.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27298850575 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92197580325 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508620689655 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0529899564 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.6875 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5625 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.478881023183 0.243740707755 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149448934433 0.0831039109588 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164009172753 0.0758088955206 216% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298163190589 0.150359130593 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139608040113 0.0667264976115 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.