All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The role of a parent in their child’s life is of great importance that can take many different shapes and forms. One of which is the relationship that exists among parents and their children’s school. It is not doubtful that a strong communication between parents and the school is a must for the benefit of our young ones but the recommendation takes the extent to which, this dynamic should work, a bit too far. Moreover, the recommendation it self could be judged as contradictory since volunteer work is not something that should be forced on people. However, essential minimum levels of volunteer time on the side of the parents to their children’s school cannot be denied.
How much time should a parent spend with their children is a very important question regarding the process of raising children. Experts’ opinions differ from one another, however, it is undeniable that a minimum amount of time should be allotted to our children, which could differ in various stages of a child’s life. In this aspect, that the recommendations suggest parents should spend time for their children, is absolutely correct, but forcing this action regardless of other factors could prove to unnecessary. Imagine that some parents do every thing they ought to do for their children. They provide a positive environment for their children to grow up in. They tend to their emotional as well as their physical needs. And in addition they also take part in every school meeting that the children’s school needs them to attend. However, in order to provide for their children, they need to spend every other minute of their lives working for the sake of the children. As a result the kid is having a very good and fulfilling life. One that will lead to his happiness. In this situation forcing the parents to volunteer time could change the entire dynamic of the family and stops the wheels to spin as smoothely as they can. In this regard the recommendation could prove to be disadvantageous.
On the other side of the spectrum, parents should be encouraged to consider some time for their children’s school. From the ages of 5 or 6, school plays a crussial moment part in children’s lives. This is the instance that they are really put into the society. Thus, parents should pay attention to the details of their children’s school life. The recommendation is on the spot on this point, that spending time to volunteer to children’s school could prove advantageous. As an instance, if a child is not doing well in a subject like math, the first instinct of parents is that the school is somehow at fault here. Either the school does not require the children to study well or maybe their teacher is neglegant toward his duties. However, this could be not the case. If the parent spent more time for their children’s school, they would find out that both the management system and the teachers are doing a perfect job, and that their child is having a problem that other children are not facing with. In this case, the parent might find the reason for their child’s shortcoming is a result of the situation at home between the parents. Or the fact that a problem with a sibling might be the cause of this. In this aspect the recommendation could prove golden, and advantages like this paint the merit of the suggestion it makes.
To recap different aspects of the recommendation, it is important for parents to spend time for their children’s school in addition to the time they spend for their children, since it can give them a more cogent picture of the lives that their children are living. It can provide them with additional information to make correct decision upon. However, the recommendation crosses the boundry by forcing this on the parent. It not exaggeration to say that most parents want their kid to grow up happy, healthy and successful, and thus they most likely will volunteer time to their children’s schools if they are given the option.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many
...fe is of great importance that can take many different shapes and forms. One of which is the r...
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Message: Did you mean 'itself'?
Suggestion: itself
...t too far. Moreover, the recommendation it self could be judged as contradictory since ...
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Message: Are you missing a verb?
...undry by forcing this on the parent. It not exaggeration to say that most parents want their kid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, regarding, so, thus, well, in addition, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 12.4196629213 225% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 33.0505617978 239% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 58.6224719101 154% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3347.0 2235.4752809 150% => OK
No of words: 680.0 442.535393258 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92205882353 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.10654576214 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91355819691 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401470588235 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 987.3 704.065955056 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4835625485 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.424242424 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6060606061 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284683826336 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936272345027 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564225996522 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223780203444 0.150359130593 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335616626054 0.0667264976115 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.