I totally agree with the suggestion that all the parents should berequired to volunteer time to their children's schools. It is not a merely method of helping the faculty of the school to work more efficiently by the supports of the adults, it is also a significant way to call attentions of the society to focus on the education at the same time. Meanwhile it would also provide a kind of supervision which could correct the potential education flaws if any. Given so many merits of the volunteering to the schools, we should keep on this rule to make our educational system more benificial to our children.
Firstly, it is a good topic even if just putting out on the table, it is a very sanguine phenomenon that we can talk about the volunteering to the schools rather than how to avoid from starvation, in another word, it is the result of the rapdi development of our society in this peaceful time in this peaceful country. Given there are some regions of the world still at war or poverty, thie essay may be not suitable for them as making a living is the first choice in their lives. Thus I really appreciated the chance of suggesting that volunteering to schools is good among parents and childrens and schools, moreover, it bings the healthy environment to th society as the emblem of emphasizing the education which would be more bennificial to the country.
Secondly, if the parents have the chance to volunteer their chilren's school, they will know clearly how the school works and whether it works well. It is important for the parents to get to know this point as it will have an influential impact on their children. For example, it the school's education quality is not good, it will reflect on the kids as well as on every fact of the school which the parents whould discern if they enter the gate of the school, so they would make a better choice for their kids. For individual students, it is more benificial for their family if the parents know how the students study in schools and whteher they study well.
Thirldy, volunteer time in chilren's schools will be the perfect chance to discover the flaws of the schools by the parents. The parents from every field of the society, they can find whether everything goes well in the school or if there are some cases should be corrected,for instance if the parents find the infrastructures like the old gym equipments should be repalced, they can advise to the shool , I believe these kind of suggestions are welcomed by most of the schools, in that the parents could find something the faculty could not discern.
Finally, as a good circulation beteen the families and schools, I belive this volunteering rule will also bring a healthy environment to the society as most people will be more and more concertrated on the education which is the one of the most significant enterprise of any coutries. There will be more communications between parents as well as the people outside the shools. In histoty, almost every country which value education was very successsful in every field at its time. So this method will bring us more than its oirginal target.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You used an adverb ('merely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('method') instead of another adjective.
...e to their childrens schools. It is not a merely method of helping the faculty of the school to...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
...ocus on the education at the same time. Meanwhile it would also provide a kind of supervi...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ing is the first choice in their lives. Thus I really appreciated the chance of sugg...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l impact on their children. For example, it the schools education quality is not ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...on their children. For example, it the schools education quality is not good, it will ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , for
...there are some cases should be corrected,for instance if the parents find the infras...
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Suggestion: ,
...e repalced, they can advise to the shool , I believe these kind of suggestions are...
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...hey can advise to the shool , I believe these kind of suggestions are welcomed by most of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2589.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 547.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73308957952 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66512521326 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420475319927 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 786.6 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.0998018838 60.3974514979 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.294117647 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1764705882 23.4991977007 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 5.21951772744 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215865763237 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835978081284 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066771137543 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135101973605 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360873012806 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.75 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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