“Allowing our children to spend hours a day IM’ing and employing social media is bound to impede their social skills as they enter adulthood and the workforce.”
The author of the given topic avers that the spending hours for watching and enjoying social media cause the limitation of their interaction skills when they grow up to the adults and have a occupation. although the potential evidences for his stance such as the disproportional trends between two main factors might be convincing, I fundamentally disagree with his opinion. The reasonable supports for his position will be suggested first, and the sources for my thoughts will be presented directly.
Admittedly, there are inevitable saying the correlation of concentrated time for social network service is reversely proportion to the attention for hanging out with their friends, family, neighbors, or relevant. Furthermore, the probability the children who loves to be alone travel throughout only internet to be grown as a less competitive communication ability can be hardly ignored because of the common sense of the bias. however, the author need to consider the following matter to strengthen his conclusion and to increase the credibility of his assertion. The rest of the essay will take account of the opposite reasons for disproving the theory that indicate poor member include highly pretend to spent their childhood on internet.
The most significant key what the author overly assumed is the distinct view of social media and the real-world learning ways to chat with others. Nevertheless the ordinary person perhaps agree with this statement, recent developing and spreading level of social media conversely provide materials to learn social skills. so many YouTube channels on social interactions or tips to talk with females have been recently opened and now everybody could even study through them. Moreover, the social media are open-ended agora to meet and discuss their own thinking with others who argue in the different position. these practices must help kids to improve their communications advantages such as how to pursue critics and introverted people.
On the top of that, the author further should consider more practical examples that can be found in social media. The range of these cannot be restrained to any few words or sentences. The influence and the regions for it rapidly grows even now. although in a few cases of using social media, gaming or spending waste contents, might be one of the cases to inefficiently decrease the ability to communicate to others, so many contents the world of website contain as much as we cannot count the number of them.
Lastly, the technologies for social media destruct the boundaries on the real-world and the social media. Virtual-Reality called VR was a paradigm shift to destroy the stereotype by introducing the ways to feel like in the real-world while they in-fact stayed in the virtual world. In addition, the breakthrough applications of online chatting system, ZOOM and 'SKYPE', bring the innovations to facilitate for efficiency time-using for delivering their ideas. In sum, our society are growing to the direction of the expanding the range of social media throughout the advanced technologies.
In conclusion, we discussed on the issue of the relationship between the inability of adults to delivering their opinions with others and the ratio of time spending for the social media. The evidences suggested by the author's side might be convincing for the readers, however, the author must contains the aforementioned factors to develop their logic to strengthen his opinions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...to spent their childhood on internet. The most significant key what the author...
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...orld learning ways to chat with others. Nevertheless the ordinary person perhaps agree with ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2923.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 551.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30490018149 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91094631575 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 215.323595506 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553539019964 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 895.5 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 14.0 4.99550561798 280% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0514049816 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.863636364 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0454545455 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208803033033 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675758880693 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663392574033 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1149271616 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354950214872 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 162.0 100.480337079 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.