To improve the education quality, schools tend to induce high-technological equipment to cultivate students’ interests in different subjects. Powerpoint, video, online classes and computers are getting involved in students’ daily study life. Critics hold the view that these technologies might have negative effects on students, for example, distracting students for real learning. From where I stand, whether these technologies have advantages or disadvantages for students who are using them needs to be considered in different aspects.
Firstly, to demonstrate if high-technology methods have conflicts with real learning, the definition of “real learning” need to be definite clearly. There are several domains in real learning, such as building students’ personalities, teaching them knowledge, cultivating their communication skills and so on. When considering technologies used in forming one’s value and personality, there might exist some shortages. Internet gives people a masque to disguise themselves, so that people on the other side of the electronic devices can not distinguish them. Young people, especially students are lacking abilities to tell right from wrong, thus they are more possible to be exposed in a unsafe environment. The using of the Internet may mislead students to a more dangerous way.
In addition, with the booming of the social media, chatting online gives people more convenience to communicate with each other, both familiar persons and strangers. Facebook, as one of the most popular social media around the world, has attracted more than 200 million users, which provided people with a more extensive area to get to know different people from varies places. When fostering students communication skills, they can have an excellent place to practice what they have learned through teachers.
However, when “real learning” refers to getting knowledge and broadening students horizons, video, computers and Internet definitely can promote educational quality. According to a research conducted by Today’s Education Journal, when getting in touch with the knowledge in watching, listening, reading and writing, students’ learning efficiency can increase about 40%, comparing to those methods only provided students one or two ways to learn. Though vision equipment, for example, video or powerpoint, students can have a more direct impression on the subjects they learn, which will absolutely contribute to their studies.
In sum, without careful categories, nobody can make a conclusion on whether using technologies might distract students from real learning. Every coin has two sides, the best way to maximum the advantages and minimize the disadvantages of the technologies on education is to use them on specific circumstances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 707, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, thus, for example, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 412.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.87378640777 5.05705443957 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20829352269 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584951456311 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3949724659 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.444444444 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8888888889 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147915215865 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559705363418 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551296928542 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0944075385981 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644193934726 0.0667264976115 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.8420337079 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.06 12.1639044944 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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