Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In this new modern era, schools are including these technologies as new methods to help teachers and students to make the latter understand the concepts of the subject better and in an interesting way. As, it has become a fact now that today's new age kids are impossible to keep them away from their gadgets. Thus, I mostly disagree with the prompt's suggestion that schools should avoid using these innovative methods as it is only going to distract the students.
The very idea of taking the step to eschew away these students from their gadgets will prove them to be rebellious against us. As, one way or another the students will always find their ways to spend on these gadgets. As matter of fact, most of the schools have already adopted the very idea to include the use of videos, computers and internet as a part-day to day learning. The government is to prasing the intiative and encourage other schools in the rural areas to adopt these methods too. A survey report result stated in the newspaper also suggest that with the use of videos, the overall average number of students actually proved to learn profound concepts quickly and at much better pace than before. Teachers and tutors have started introducing the very idea of usefulness of internet to these kids at a young ages, by telling them to surf on the net if they do not understand something related to subject being taught and openly state their doubts to their teachers. This is a most useful way that will help students to imbibe this habit of solving their own doubts at such younger ages which will only prove to be beneficial in their higher studies.
Schools should not only limit themselves to the use of technology to videos, computers and internet. Slowly the world is realising the fact that, with introduction to these new technologies in a child's life in a controlled manner only proves to be beneficial in the long term. Hence, schools should keep on figuring out new ways and use of these innovations to help students not only understand the subject to be indirectly they also learn the correct use of these technologies at a young age. As, if we let them find their own way to explore the use of these gadgets the chances are that they might not learn the right way. Hence, better is instead of restricting them the use we should allow them to explore under the guidance of an elder.
Yes, there have been cases where students have got distracted from their path and education by these technologies. Where instead of paying attention in the lectures or studying in their room they are busy wasting their time on these gadgets or the internet. But due to such events occuring, it does not mean that we should just keep them away from using it. The elders, school, the government will need to introduce new ways to help them understand the correct use of these technologies and help them know their path in life in ways where these innovations will help them achieve at an efficient and better pace.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an interesting way" with adverb for "interesting"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... the concepts of the subject better and in an interesting way. As, it has become a fact now that toda...
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Line 1, column 343, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'prompts'' or 'prompt's'?
Suggestion: prompts'; prompt's
...dgets. Thus, I mostly disagree with the prompts suggestion that schools should avoid us...
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Line 2, column 702, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pts quickly and at much better pace than before. Teachers and tutors have started...
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Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...omputers and internet. Slowly the world is realising the fact that, with introduction to the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, if, so, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2461.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67870722433 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43344002487 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43536121673 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 750.6 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3866934533 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.526315789 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6842105263 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.47368421053 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156976085764 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628668692122 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346339525155 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114911237629 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.009591159868 0.0667264976115 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 48.8420337079 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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