"Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are
entirely harmless, they in fact, prevent people from developing into truly strong and
independent individuals."
The issue raises a controversial view of whether or not luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are preventing from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. Although i agree with the beliefs of the speaker, there are some benefits of luxuries and conviences of contemporary life. Consider the automobile, people are now using it as a luxury rather than necessity. We depend a lot on the automobile which prevents us from becoming a strong and individual person.
First of all, consider the effect of automobile on our independence as individuals. In some respects the automobile serves to enhance our independence. For instance, cars make people isolated from the peopele of public transport. And teenagers discover that owning a car, or even borrowing one on occasion, affords them a needed sense of independence from their paraents.
However, cars have diminished our independence in many respects. Our dependency on car increasing day by day. We are using a car for going a short trips to the corner store or for carting our children to and from school. Moreover, cars now become the symbol of social status to some people. For this types of people willing undermining their financial status for seeing themselves in brand new sedan of this year. In short, people are becoming the salve of the automobile.
In addition, consider the impact of automobiles on our strength as an individuals. It might be possible that having a brand new sedan will increase a person's dignity or social status, but it cannot be proved someone strength. Also, dependency on cars gives less opportunity for physical exercise which can be possible through walking, running.
On the other hand, autombolie can help us by making journey shorter and safer. By this people get more time to spend with their family. Also they can do home-based exercises that make them fit thus increasing individual physical strength. Furthermore, they can spend the extra time for making their own food which makes them more independent.
In sum, the automobile is giving messages that when luxuries become a necessity, the individual strength and independence diminish. Although automobile has made life easier, created a large number of jobs, raised our living standard, we are becoming the slave of the automobile. However, by becoming the slave of automobile we trade of our independence and inner strength.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 42, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...he issue raises a controversial view of whether or not luxuries and conveniences of contempora...
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Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...g and independent individuals. Although i agree with the beliefs of the speaker, ...
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Line 9, column 296, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ol of social status to some people. For this types of people willing undermining the...
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Line 13, column 68, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...mpact of automobiles on our strength as an individuals. It might be possible that having a bra...
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Line 13, column 151, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...aving a brand new sedan will increase a persons dignity or social status, but it cannot...
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Line 17, column 83, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...by making journey shorter and safer. By this people get more time to spend with thei...
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Line 17, column 137, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...t more time to spend with their family. Also they can do home-based exercises that m...
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Line 21, column 183, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...utomobile has made life easier, created a large number of jobs, raised our living standard, we ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in short, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26356589147 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92838627697 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529715762274 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1672686294 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.875 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.125 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175007507172 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535265782215 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735784757734 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0983044209931 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11590641105 0.0667264976115 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.